Still wings steely eye,
emotionless makes no cry,
for one to live many must die,
one more hour to eat.
Heartless trekking feeling guilt,
whilst out of air conditioning white men wilt,
dinner will be served in an hour !
God did not desert these folk we all of us forgot,
United nations bullshit
we left them there to rot.
How can we as a species let atrocities occur,
except of course in Africa,
it's not outside our door !
What became of the child we will never know,
perhaps they're living still
while the vulture keeps on searching looking for its fill.
Still wings and toothless roar,
two nations think they're regal,
One embellished of a bulldog the other of an eagle.
Author notes
I dont think under 16 should be banned i think it should be compulsory so they can see the sins of their forefathers.
picture prompt entry
A contest entry
- 16 poets..picture prompt...NO ONE UNDER 16 YRS>!!!! by parntsoftwins.
300 points, ended January 13, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-write party. by Naridill.
300 points, ended January 13, 2008, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I think it should be "steely" in line one. This is obviously penned with passion and a desire to be heard, as well as a desire to see change. I admire your heart.
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I think you need to clean up the grammar a little bit (line 14 "they're" should be singular if referring to the child; line 17 "their" should be "there").
You have written quite simply, and with some passion. I am not sure about your singling out Britain and America (I guess) in the last line, but I am giving you a couple of rounds of applause for shooting from the hip. Congratulations on the gold trophy back in January.
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Wonderfull Written My Friend !
I really like this poem , for it tells the truth of what is really going on in the world that we live in.But it is so sad that little one's must go hungry and even wait for a certain time in which they may even have one bite of food at all ! What becomes of the child we will never know, Perhaps they're living still, while the vulture keeps on searching looking for it's fill.Worded very well ! Brenda Gae
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Good poem; told with passion.
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I looked at the original image inspiration and feel you have left this a little less impactive as the image but all in all a very needed piece.
Thanks for entering.
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Ouch!
The truth hurts, doesn't it? Yes, you did good with this one. It's painful and drums up throbs in the temples. Much controversy this has caused and we will always pay for the sins of our forefathers, unless someone, somewhere, can finally get it right. The United Nations is defunct. It serves no purpose. Haven't seen the pic. Will go do that now. Best to you in the contest.--Ke -
I liked this piece a lot!!
It speaks a lot in these few words,
I saw the pictures,
I think you did this piece very well...
Hope you keep writing
-Annie Shadows♥
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I viewed the picture and it's a story in itself.
You have done a magnificent job with the prompt,
and the emotion of this piece is so vivid.
"Heartless treking feeling guilt,
whilst out of air conditioning white men wilt,
dinner will be served in an hour !"
How sad,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
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I'm afraid B&B are merely pawns in the ugly schemes of this world, however abominable their declared and covert wars may be, the atrocities they allow and support to spike their buddies' bank accounts. The real power in this world is elsewhere, hidden behind a shipload of fronts of which the ones the world sees are altruistic, politically and legally correct charades.
http://www.vaticanassassins.org/
Thanks for creating and sharing. best of luck in the contest. Take care,
AD
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