Traveling until it struck its target
Getting the lives of thousands
Causing the cry of billions
Makes blood flow…
Traveling out of the sight
From Cupid’s bow
Getting the sadness out of the heart
And quest for the right one stop
Traveling up and high
Trying to pass the densest clouds
Until it stop, until it broke up
Falling faster directly to the ground
Traveling slowly and gently
Destroying the mirror of selfishness
Until the golden light freed
Nourishing the soul with holiness
Traveling continuously searching for the right path
Until it becomes tired
Finding the peacefulness and satisfaction it wants
Now it stops permanently, it rests forever!
Author notes
JUST WANT TO TRY POETRY..
IS IT OK OR A DISASTER?
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awsome i loved this poem it was full of great work i enjoyed the read very nice keep it up....
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Thank you very much! :)
...maraming salamat po!
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MORE THAN OK
Good morning Pink Hawk,I hope that your day is filled with fun and laughter.I have just finished reading your poem and really felt the need to comment on it.Firstly i would like to welcome you to AP.I am also new here, so i am still feeling my way around here, getting to know all the other beautiful poets here.I am sure you will be made to feel welcome,just as i have been.Now lets get back to your write lol.You have written with such beauty.If this is your first attempt..well you certainly have bowled me over.you have penned an awesome write.the flow was great, the images it showed were wonderful and the reader could easily understand the message that the write conveyed.Never put your quill down my friend,because i see great talent here.I look forward to reading more of you as you continue to post.
Take care Pink, and much love to you.
Angel.
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thank you again!
...before i never imagine that i would be or explore this world (poetry) because they said its's boring but then-- all of a sudden, i want to write something and end up writing...so i'm really thankful for having friends here who are experts in this field like you ma'am! thanks again!
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Welcome to ap you have written an amazing write here. Keep up the wonderful writing Again welcome
Theresa
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Very Good
Traveling continuously searching for the right path
Until it becomes tired
Finding the peacefulness and satisfaction it wants
Now it stops permanently, it rests forever!
I like the thought of this
Well done
Rick
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wow. if this is your first time, then you are awesome! I love this piece- the metaphors were great and the imagery was awesome. It's not just ok- it's a great write!
Just a line though: the last line is not right- has to be:
Now it stops permanently, it rests forever!
Other than that, this was great! I like how you went with the whole idea. great work! && welcome to AP! you'll love it here
best lucks!
--love,
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Welcome to AllPoetry
You did a fine job 'trying poetry' well done on a great first effort, hope to see more
We hope you enjoy your time here at All Poetry
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Don't forget the best way to get comments on your poetry is to read and comment on others
Karen
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As your comment stated-you wanted to try poetry-well I think you did a great job on your first published one here. You gave the arrow personification, brought it to life-
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Thank you ma'am!!!
...thank you for your comment, it gives me hope that somehow I can also write a poem and try new things like poetry...I want to explore the world behind rhyming letters expressing mix emotions because somehow it tickles my curiosity and imagination.....thank you again ma'am, hope I can learn things from an expert like you!!!!!
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