A winter cold weather spell
Doth in my mind a frozen lake
For love to stretch
Her talons of lust
And snatch me into her embrace
Forth drawing me near
Into her bosoms so dear
Of Soft and silky and lace
A crystal palace
And a golden chalice
She brings
To quench my tastes
A contest entry
- Rhythms of Rispetto by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended January 12, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like this...it's really good. Keep writin...
LY,
Sarah Lea
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Contest Entry
Hi! Blue Rew how are you?
I have edited the poem to sound more rhythmic with rhyme and time.
Thank You!
Articfalcon
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This write is full of fire and feeling...
but I will echo Pamela on this; it is not in
the required form for this theme. Please let
us know if and when you edit. Blue
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Though this is a lovely piece, it is not a Rispetto. There is still time to amend before the judging. Please ask either myself or Blue if you need any assistance.
I will say though, I do like this poem a great deal.
~Pamela
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wow. This is a powerfully strong write,
with great descriptiveness. I love the
way you wrote this, with very descriptive words
and phrasing. really captures our imagination.
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