Not enough paper, I write on the sky.
Not enough pathways, I turn in good-bye.
Here's to the moments, the days that slipped by.
I live for you, Mine.
The sun is to moon what the day is to night.
There's light and there's dark and blindness in sight.
I know what I saw which is why I took flight.
The actions are mine.
Only mine.
I dance on the meadows, I drift in soul's dream.
I try to be always whatever I seem.
Here's to deduction and here's to Supreme.
I live for you, Mine.
My life is to dying what love is to hate.
There's life and there's death and wisdom too late.
I'll find all the answers when at Heaven's gate.
The solace is mine. Love divine.
Final choice mine.
Love Divine.
Author notes
Inspired by PEARL JAM's song, I am Mine.
I Am Mine
http://home.att.net/~chuckayoub/iammine.html
http://youtube.com/watch?v=BXISm3JjYU0
In a list
A contest entry
- Pearl Jam~A Contest~ by Angel With No Halo.
900 points, ended February 11, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ahhh, this is in classic form lass.
Articulate wording and just great rhythm to piece.
Sort of slides in on the priphial side of the brain and settles comfortably.
This is Art.
Me Irish grand ma used to tell me,
Lowell...
Write something grand,
for you may be
entertaining Angels
Unaware.
She was always right.
Peace always,
LOWELL POE
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Hallo Lowell ...
Thank you for your kind and divine comment. I loved it.
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A wonderfully lyrical poem. I can see why it took gold. I liked your word choice and the way the similes were presented. My favorite line was
"There's life and there's death and wisdom too late."
Wisdom to late. Us poets are always trying to offer our wisdom to a younger generation before its to late. Unfortunately, the young think themselves immortal.
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Ah DennisP1 ...
but the young IS immortal ... and we too!
Thank you for reading.
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A beautiful write...of strength of self. Great job, beautiful imagery.
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Thank you ...
I am glad you liked this write, Nevadapoet.
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Did anyone ever tell you that you have exceptional talent in rhyming poetry. It's impressive I tell you.
This is precise and eloquent.
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I am glad you liked it Jaden ...
it is not easy to impress you I tell you.
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Exquisite!
I was drawn into it by the first line I read. Very compelling and powerful, I must say!
My life is to dying what love is to hate.
There's life and there's death and wisdom too late.
I'll find all the answers when at Heaven's gate.
The solace is mine. Love divine.
Final choice mine.
Very creative imagery! Congrats on the gold!
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Beautiful
I was grabbed from the first line and just immersed myself in the imagery that flowed as i continued. Great Write
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Thank you so much, FB ...
for being on my page ... and for your very kind comment.
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I am glad you were open to the poem ...
and its message. Thank you so much for your kind comment.
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I love it! I love the flow of it, the way it rhymes, and most of all the meaning behind it. Great job.
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Ah DD Sai ...
I am glad both structure and content pleased you. Thank you for the zesty comment.
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Very nicely done with a good rhythm and flow. Happy trails
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Thank you so much, David ...
for the blessings.
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This is amazing, I wish I could write with a third of this talent. Great, great write. Truly enjoyed it.
Tal.
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Thank you so much for a kind response ...
I bet you DO write in your own voice ... And that makes poetry so beautiful and kaleidoscopic ... I shall read some of your work ...
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Thank you very much.
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WOW my friend this one is FANTASTIC!!!
Congratulations on the Golden cup and this is really an extrodanary piece!
Congratualions on the Spotlight!
To write in the sky makes me think off daydreaming and how you portayed this picture just took my thoughts to inspirational places!
You are a gifted poet!!!
Becks
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Becks ...
Thank you for your enthusiasm! Jou geesdrif is tog te oulik. En ja, jy verstaan hierdie Boerenooi al skryf ek dan nou ook Rooinek-taal.
Thank you for reading and commenting, Poetess.
Liefies.
Myra
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hi i thought this write was thought about and alot of attention went in to it is is really good and enjoyed reading it
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Hallo M ...
Good to see you back. Thank you for your comment. Your book will be there soon!
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Thank you, Thomas ...
I appreciate you reading my work.
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Good Stuff.
This fine piece clearly deserves the attention it has received.
Thanks for this.
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Don't know that you need this old gent to add his twopennorth as the others have so well said it. The gold is well merited and will, of course, look outstanding on your mantelshelf!
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Old Gent?
GRIN ... I see no old gent. But: a ponderous Poet. Thank you for your top-pen-worth ... I enjoy reading your words on poetry.
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Soft and gentle flow. The rhyme and meter were very much in time. I really enjoyed the work, even if laced with a touch of inter-subjective ideology. Pearl Jam was once one of my favorite bands. Brings back great memories from the early 90's lol. Missed your work while I was away. I need to spend more time reading at AP.
Be well,
Brian
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Ah Hallo Brian ...
I am so glad you are back at AP. But that I've said already ... I do not have to try and guess who the cuty on your photo is ... Like Daddy, like baby!
Blessed be, my friend.
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< Thank you One and Only Lynn Jones!
You make me smile ... I should read you ... You sound regal.
Adding your comment:
Lowell Poe right now