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Scribbles in Signs

Not enough paper, I write on the sky.
Not enough pathways, I turn in good-bye.
Here's to the moments, the days that slipped by.

I live for you, Mine.

The sun is to moon what the day is to night.
There's light and there's darkness and blindness in sight.
I know what I saw which is why I took flight.

The actions are mine.
Only mine.

I dance on the meadows, I drift in soul's dream.
I try to be always whatever I seem.
Here's to deduction and here's to Supreme.

I live for you, Mine.

My life is to dying what love is to hate.
There's life and there's death and wisdom too late.
I'll find all the answers when at Heaven's gate.

The solace is mine. Love divine.
Final choice mine.

Love Divine.







Author notes

Inspired by PEARL JAM's song, I am Mine.

I Am Mine
http://home.att.net/~chuckayoub/iammine.html
http://youtube.com/watch?v=BXISm3JjYU0

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  • Shya
    October 9

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    This flowed wonderfully and had a rythm that I enjoyed reading. The comparisons (kind of a form repeated throughout) were well-written! The only suggestion I have is to say "darkness" rather than "dark" in the second three-line stanza. I feel that this would make the line flow more smoothly. I love your use of repitition here, but sometimes I felt a little unclear on what you were trying to convey. Overall, great write. Thanks for sharing!


    • myrataal silver member
      October 9
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      Ah thank you Shya!

      I agree! Darkness does sound better. Thank you so much. Love to you.


  • paullallady silver member
    January 9, 2008

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    This is so very soft, tender and has a real
    sing-song quality. It is descriptive tenderness
    dancing on the wind. wonderful.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      < Thank you so much ...

      for reading my work. I hope all is well with you!

      Love
      Myra


  • Canis Lupus
    January 9, 2008

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    I really love this, the flow, the rhyme, it reads so easily off the screen, lol and it just had such a lovely feel about it, I can't describe it! Almost like a bedtime story. ahhh Well done and good luck to you in the contest!


  • rite
    January 9, 2008

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    The answer given before the question was posed. Synchronization in a frail fragrance of poetry, mocking time beyond its ability to reclaim its rule in a way without effort of dark intent. Your words are a dance through space and time, urging them to report what they fail to put down to words Thank you precious Muse for creating and sharing. I wish you the best in the contest. Ack,

    Chris

    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      < Ah Chris!

      I returned to this comment ... and thank you again for your words of true insight and compassion. I did rate your comment five stars, but it is worth far more.

      Love
      Myra


  • SilverQ
    September 24
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    Excelent!

    Beautifully written, flows wonderfully. Very deep!


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you SQ, for reading my work.

      Another one of my poems that I should apply more often, right?

      Love
      Myra

  • so pretty

    it flows beautifully, the rhyming is wonderful, I love it


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you so much for reading my poetry!

      I should get to yours immediately ...

      Love
      Myra


  • awannabepoet
    August 27

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    How sweet a rhyme, how wonderful the cascade this poem does flow with message and meaning quite divine.

    I like it, I like it so!


    • myrataal silver member
      August 27
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      Thank you SO much for reading, Poet ...

      I will return the favor as soon as I have more time.


  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    April 15, 2008
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    Excellent

    The structure of this poem is perfect. I love your style of writing and the way you use your word choices to create an amazing effect in your writing. ~Peace~Gar


    • myrataal silver member
      August 26
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      < Thank you so much for this comment Gar ...

      I missed it! Only saw it now.

  • I usually don't like poems that rhyme, but you've renewed my faith in them. Lovely poem.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you so much for ...

      a lovely comment. Sorry I did not respond to it before.

      Love
      Myra

  • Ahhh lovely, this is almost a song and in fact I heard a little song in my head as I read it. Its really beautiful but what I liked most was the way it just flowedl.

    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Hallo GoldenDawn!

      I am sorry, I did not see this comment. Thank you so much for reading my work!

      I shall try to get to your work too.

      Love
      Myra


  • Dolce
    July 6

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    As always Myra, as always you take my breath away with the wonderous webs you weave with the words you wove into my mind and I wish I could be as devine.

    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Sorry Poet ...

      I did not see this comment, for some reason! Please forgive me. This was such a hectic year with so many challenges. I will try to get to your work soon.

      Love
      Myra

  • excelent writting

    14.My life is to dying what love is to hate.
    15.There's life and there's death and wisdom too late.
    16.I'll find all the answers when at Heaven's gate.
    Very touching as well as beautiful

    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you so much for this comment ...

      which I did not see at all! Wow, where have I been all the time? I cannot believe how I lag behind on comments!
      Love to you!
      Myra

  • This is very well done. It flows smoothly and the idea comes across strikingly. Well done.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you so much ...

      for this comment that I did not see at the time. I shall try to return the favor.

      Love
      Myra

  • Excellent

    'tis a wonderful write, indeed. You always express your ideas quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you for reading my work!

      And for your continued encouragement.
      Love to you!
      Myra

  • mwzephyr
    July 6
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    left me spinning like a top.
    Well done though!

    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      LOL ...

      Spinning like a top, eh? Some music does that!

      Thank you for reading my work!

      I love your nom de plume!

      Blessings
      Myra

  • Lovely

    It is great.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Ah. Thank you ...

      for reading my work. I truly appreciate this.

      Love
      Myra

  • Too see rhyming poetry featured warms my heart. Especially as you do it so well.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you so much ...

      for this comment and for reading my work. I certainly love rhyming poems.

      Be well, dear One.
      Myra


  • Dryad Enya
    July 6

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    This is incredable, your layout adding only to the effect of leaving your breath stolen from lungs that seem unworthy to read this.

    http://www.last.fm/listen/artist/Tryad/ similarartists#pane=webRadioPlayer&station=%252Flisten%252Fartist%252FTryad%252Fsimilarartists

    May i add this song goes very nicely as well, i will war you as soon as the singing begins it is on the awful side but the intro fits with a cold pressision.

    'Not enough paper, I write on the sky.
    Not enough pathways, I turn in good-bye.
    Here's to the moments, the days that slipped by'
    This first stanza was my favourite, captivating, integging and most of all well deployed.

    Well done,
    Gorecki.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      I loved reading your comment ...

      and thank you so much for taking the time to read my work. I truly appreciate it.

      Love
      Myra

  • gorgeous =]


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you so much for this comment ...

      that I did not respond to in writing. Please forgive me.

      Love
      Myra

  • I really like this poem... just was reading it out loud and it really made me smile


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you for a beautiful comment ...

      It was wondrous to read about the smile. I love to make people smile, do you know?

      Myra


  • John Doe
    July 5
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    What a beautiful message and a well written rhyming poem, it has such a great flow.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Hallo John

      Sorry I did not respond in writing to your comment. I appreciate you reading my work.


      Myra


  • daemonfae
    February 26

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    I so relate to this "Not enough paper, I write on the sky." Its all just so beautifully put! Im coming back for that youtube link. Dankie vir die.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Sorry I did not notice this comment ...

      I must have been offline for a long time!

      Thank you so much for reading my work.

      Love
      Myra


    • myrataal silver member
      June 9
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      I am sorry I missed ths comment ...

      Thank you so much for reading ... Baie dankie ... die plesier is myne.

  • Just4u
    January 31
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    Has a light and lovely bounce to it and so true not only in religion
    but also in life itself "there's blindness in sight" for to often the wants
    of the heart overcome the needs of it...

    Hugs...Eddy

    I came through back door to save you points on featured one but
    couldn't find so picked another, and a good "choice" it was...
    pun intended...


    • myrataal silver member
      June 9
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      Hallo Eddy ...

      Sorry I did not notice your comment earlier. Thank you so much for not forgetting me. Love to you, Poet.


  • icyrose
    January 6

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    I really love the freedom expressed in this...with such a quirky flow and choice of words, which adds splendidly to the care-free feeling of the piece.
    Ah, to take charge for one's own happiness...that only the true road!
    I also see the introspection in this...and the juxtaposition of the opposites really contrasted wonderfully...almost to glorify life to the fullest, only possible in the presence of death.

    Wonderful write!


    • myrataal silver member
      January 6
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      Thank you so much ...

      for your warm and insightful comment. icyrose.


  • buddhax
    December 28, 2008
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    I loved this poem greatly!


    • myrataal silver member
      December 29, 2008
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      I am so glad you did!

      Thank you for reading my work.


  • csmmoms2
    November 23, 2008
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    Ooh

    Crop circles and a song in rhymes. How lovely...I Iive for you, mine. -c


    • myrataal silver member
      November 23, 2008
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      Yes?


      Tell her ... she would love it!

      Thank you for reading and commenting.


  • DustinsGirl11508
    November 21, 2008
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    Very good [: 3 applause.


    • myrataal silver member
      November 21, 2008
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      Thank you so much ...

      for reading and applauding. I appreciate seeing you here.


  • My Souls Reflection gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    WOW...this is absolutely beautiful. Very spiritual...I love it!

    Congratulations on the Gold trophy...very well deserved.

    Love and hugs,
    Annie


    • myrataal silver member
      November 21, 2008
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      Thank you, Annie ...

      and also for the messages of hope you post on this website.


  • el dia
    November 21, 2008
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    wowww i liked it !


    • myrataal silver member
      November 21, 2008
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      El dia ...

      I am so glad you liked this. Thank you for reading and commenting.


  • MargaretG
    November 21, 2008

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    Beautiful - I'm glad this was featured so that I could read it again.
    "There's life and there's death and wisdom too late."
    This is our tragedy, I think, but you find the solace for us. :


    • myrataal silver member
      November 21, 2008
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      Thank you, Margaret, beloved friend ..

      It is such a joy to have you here.


  • nunu26
    November 20, 2008
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    amazing I loved it..


    • myrataal silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      Thank you very much, nunu26 ...

      I am grateful for your visit.


  • HopeInForever
    November 20, 2008

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    this is truly beautiful; the words are so simple, but so peaceful, and the way it reads is very calming and just so lovely.


    • myrataal silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      What a lovely name you have!

      Marianne Therese ... I am glad that you liked my poem.


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Exellent! I see why you won the gold! I saw this listed in the "spotlight" on the home page and I just had to read it...I'm so glad I did! Pam

    • myrataal silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      Thank you, Pam ...

      I was not aware that the poem is in the spotlight. I should go see who promoted this? Nevertheless, thank you so much for reading and commenting!


  • MacDaddy13
    November 20, 2008
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    WoW

    This is an amazing poem. It is very beautiful. Keep up with the hard work.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you so much ...

      for reading my work -- I am sorry I did not see this comment.
      Love
      Myra


    • myrataal silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      Hallo MacDaddy13 ...

      welcome to my page. Thank you for your zesty comment!


  • pangur ban
    November 20, 2008

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    What a gorgeous poem! Yes, there is great solace in love. This piece flows so well. Effective rhyme. I really enjoyed reading. Congratulations on a well-earned gold.

    Kind regards,
    PB

    • myrataal silver member
      September 24
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      Thank you PB

      for this comment that I did not respond to in writing. Must have been a hectic time for me. But I did rate it five stars!

      Hope you are fine!

      Love
      Myra


    • myrataal silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      Ah PB. Good to see you.

      Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Kindest regards to you too!


  • donnz
    November 20, 2008
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    Unending Faith

    Your words and form are beautiful
    Your 'Faith is even more so.


    • myrataal silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      Thank you for this lovely comment ...

      and may I add, then: my friend Donnz is even more beautiful.


  • Darmok
    November 20, 2008

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    Devine

    sweet surrender, Love Devine, in search of the answers Love is mine.

    Such a wonderful message ~love~,
    the ultimate choice for self and practice.

    Darmok


    • myrataal silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      Ah ... Good to see you, Darmok ...

      How are you?
      Thank you for reading and commenting. I truly appreciate it.


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    The simplicity of being and accepting,
    being true to your self brings joy
    beautiful and uplifting
    I am gad I stopped by
    God bless you my friend...


    • myrataal silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      Thank you for your kind comment ...

      and for the blessings. Right back to you! Love Myra


  • Kari gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    This is just stunning. Congrats on your gold here. Very well done indeed. I love this piece a lot.


    • myrataal silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      Thank you so much, Kari.

      It is good to see you around.


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    and pic too myra,,honestly.? what am i like? x


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    October 24, 2008
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    MEADOWS..you are a romantic..they are gone...but daisies and buttercups are in your mind x


    • myrataal silver member
      October 25, 2008
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      Ah thank you Peter for reading ...

      and now ... you changed your name again ... Peter 'o Tool?

  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    October 19, 2008

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    Excellent

    I like your sentiment better. I am not so sure about the motivations of Pearl Jam. Excellent job of this one my friend. ~Peace~Gar


    • myrataal silver member
      October 19, 2008
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      Thank you, Friend ...

      for the comment and for visiting -- I appreciate it.

  • Theasp
    October 13, 2008

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    dreamy in truth

    You could have stopped at solace, love capitalized it. Only I would say this to one of your great talent, but
    you are almost perfect and I still see the endless pain of your life. Love
    theasp

    • myrataal silver member
      October 13, 2008

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      A very endearing comment ... Thank you!

      theasp ... The sorrow of my life has made me who I am ... but the happiness too! I know this life is temporary and it gives me intense hope. Thank you for being gentle.


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Superb writing!

    Good morning dear friend, oh how I've missed reading your muse!

    As ever, your meter and rhyme are impeccably done. And I'm left with two viewing screens.

    One as the Creator looking down at all he's created, and no matter what has befallen, the unconditional love for all.

    The second and most powerful is the reflection of Self -- the assuredness of making the right choices in life. Metaphorically speaking - A soul most in tune!

    A most wonderful rendering of ink.
    Congratulations on this Well deserved Gold!

    Love and many blessings,
    Sandi


    • myrataal silver member
      October 13, 2008
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      Thank you so much, Sandi ...

      so good to see you ... will read you tonight. LOVE to you.


  • Lowell Poe
    October 7, 2008

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    Ahhh, this is in classic form lass.
    Articulate wording and just great rhythm to piece.
    Sort of slides in on the priphial side of the brain and settles comfortably.
    This is Art.

    Me Irish grand ma used to tell me,
    Lowell...

    Write something grand,
    for you may be
    entertaining Angels
    Unaware.

    She was always right.

    Peace always,
    LOWELL POE


    • myrataal silver member
      October 7, 2008
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      Hallo Lowell ...

      Thank you for your kind and divine comment. I loved it.


  • DennisP1
    September 9, 2008

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    A wonderfully lyrical poem. I can see why it took gold. I liked your word choice and the way the similes were presented. My favorite line was

    "There's life and there's death and wisdom too late."

    Wisdom to late. Us poets are always trying to offer our wisdom to a younger generation before its to late. Unfortunately, the young think themselves immortal.


    • myrataal silver member
      October 7, 2008
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      Ah DennisP1 ...

      but the young IS immortal ... and we too!

      Thank you for reading.


  • nevadapoet
    August 23, 2008
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    A beautiful write...of strength of self. Great job, beautiful imagery.


    • myrataal silver member
      October 7, 2008
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      Thank you ...

      I am glad you liked this write, Nevadapoet.


  • Jaden silver member
    August 13, 2008

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    Did anyone ever tell you that you have exceptional talent in rhyming poetry. It's impressive I tell you.

    This is precise and eloquent.


    • myrataal silver member
      August 13, 2008
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      I am glad you liked it Jaden ...

      it is not easy to impress you I tell you.


  • hammy66
    July 19, 2008

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    Beautiful

    I was grabbed from the first line and just immersed myself in the imagery that flowed as i continued. Great Write


    • myrataal silver member
      August 7, 2008
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      < Thank you so much, FB ...

      for being on my page ... and for your very kind comment.


    • myrataal silver member
      July 20, 2008
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      I am glad you were open to the poem ...

      and its message. Thank you so much for your kind comment.


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 5, 2008

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    Exquisite!

    I was drawn into it by the first line I read. Very compelling and powerful, I must say!

    My life is to dying what love is to hate.
    There's life and there's death and wisdom too late.
    I'll find all the answers when at Heaven's gate.

    The solace is mine. Love divine.
    Final choice mine.

    Very creative imagery! Congrats on the gold!


  • DD Sai
    July 18, 2008

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    I love it! I love the flow of it, the way it rhymes, and most of all the meaning behind it. Great job.


    • myrataal silver member
      July 20, 2008
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      < Ah DD Sai ...

      I am glad both structure and content pleased you. Thank you for the zesty comment.

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