Not enough paper, I write on the sky.
Not enough pathways, I turn in good-bye.
Here's to the moments, the days that slipped by.
I live for you, Mine.
The sun is to moon what the day is to night.
There's light and there's darkness and blindness in sight.
I know what I saw which is why I took flight.
The actions are mine.
Only mine.
I dance on the meadows, I drift in soul's dream.
I try to be always whatever I seem.
Here's to deduction and here's to Supreme.
I live for you, Mine.
My life is to dying what love is to hate.
There's life and there's death and wisdom too late.
I'll find all the answers when at Heaven's gate.
The solace is mine. Love divine.
Final choice mine.
Love Divine.
Author notes
Inspired by PEARL JAM's song, I am Mine.
I Am Mine
http://home.att.net/~chuckayoub/iammine.html
http://youtube.com/watch?v=BXISm3JjYU0
In a list
A contest entry
- Pearl Jam~A Contest~ by Angel With No Halo.
900 points, ended February 11, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This flowed wonderfully and had a rythm that I enjoyed reading. The comparisons (kind of a form repeated throughout) were well-written! The only suggestion I have is to say "darkness" rather than "dark" in the second three-line stanza. I feel that this would make the line flow more smoothly. I love your use of repitition here, but sometimes I felt a little unclear on what you were trying to convey. Overall, great write. Thanks for sharing!
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Ah thank you Shya!
I agree! Darkness does sound better. Thank you so much. Love to you.
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This is so very soft, tender and has a real
sing-song quality. It is descriptive tenderness
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< Thank you so much ...
for reading my work. I hope all is well with you!
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Myra
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I really love this, the flow, the rhyme, it reads so easily off the screen, lol and it just had such a lovely feel about it, I can't describe it! Almost like a bedtime story. ahhh Well done and good luck to you in the contest!
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< How are you?
I hope fine ...
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The answer given before the question was posed. Synchronization in a frail fragrance of poetry, mocking time beyond its ability to reclaim its rule in a way without effort of dark intent. Your words are a dance through space and time, urging them to report what they fail to put down to words
Thank you precious Muse for creating and sharing. I wish you the best in the contest. Ack,
Chris
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< Ah Chris!
I returned to this comment ... and thank you again for your words of true insight and compassion. I did rate your comment five stars, but it is worth far more.
Love
Myra
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Excelent!
Beautifully written, flows wonderfully. Very deep!
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Thank you SQ, for reading my work.
Another one of my poems that I should apply more often, right?
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Myra
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Thank you so much for reading my poetry!
I should get to yours immediately ...
Love
Myra
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How sweet a rhyme, how wonderful the cascade this poem does flow with message and meaning quite divine.
I like it, I like it so!
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Thank you SO much for reading, Poet ...
I will return the favor as soon as I have more time.
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Excellent
The structure of this poem is perfect. I love your style of writing and the way you use your word choices to create an amazing effect in your writing. ~Peace~Gar
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< Thank you so much for this comment Gar ...
I missed it! Only saw it now.
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I usually don't like poems that rhyme, but you've renewed my faith in them. Lovely poem.
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Thank you so much for ...
a lovely comment. Sorry I did not respond to it before.
Love
Myra
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Ahhh lovely, this is almost a song and in fact I heard a little song in my head as I read it. Its really beautiful but what I liked most was the way it just flowedl.
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Hallo GoldenDawn!
I am sorry, I did not see this comment. Thank you so much for reading my work!
I shall try to get to your work too.
Love
Myra
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As always Myra, as always you take my breath away with the wonderous webs you weave with the words you wove into my mind and I wish I could be as devine.
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Sorry Poet ...
I did not see this comment, for some reason! Please forgive me. This was such a hectic year with so many challenges. I will try to get to your work soon.
Love
Myra
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excelent writting
14.My life is to dying what love is to hate.
15.There's life and there's death and wisdom too late.
16.I'll find all the answers when at Heaven's gate.
Very touching as well as beautiful
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Thank you so much for this comment ...
which I did not see at all! Wow, where have I been all the time? I cannot believe how I lag behind on comments!
Love to you!
Myra
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This is very well done. It flows smoothly and the idea comes across strikingly. Well done.
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Thank you so much ...
for this comment that I did not see at the time. I shall try to return the favor.
Love
Myra
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Excellent
'tis a wonderful write, indeed. You always express your ideas quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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Thank you for reading my work!
And for your continued encouragement.
Love to you!
Myra
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left me spinning like a top.
Well done though!
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LOL ...
Spinning like a top, eh? Some music does that!
Thank you for reading my work!
I love your nom de plume!
Blessings
Myra
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Lovely
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Ah. Thank you ...
for reading my work. I truly appreciate this.
Love
Myra
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Too see rhyming poetry featured warms my heart. Especially as you do it so well.
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Thank you so much ...
for this comment and for reading my work. I certainly love rhyming poems.
Be well, dear One.
Myra
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This is incredable, your layout adding only to the effect of leaving your breath stolen from lungs that seem unworthy to read this.
http://www.last.fm/listen/artist/Tryad/ similarartists#pane=webRadioPlayer&station=%252Flisten%252Fartist%252FTryad%252Fsimilarartists
May i add this song goes very nicely as well, i will war you as soon as the singing begins it is on the awful side but the intro fits with a cold pressision.
'Not enough paper, I write on the sky.
Not enough pathways, I turn in good-bye.
Here's to the moments, the days that slipped by'
This first stanza was my favourite, captivating, integging and most of all well deployed.
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I loved reading your comment ...
and thank you so much for taking the time to read my work. I truly appreciate it.
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Myra
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gorgeous =]
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Thank you so much for this comment ...
that I did not respond to in writing. Please forgive me.
Love
Myra
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I really like this poem... just was reading it out loud and it really made me smile
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Thank you for a beautiful comment ...
It was wondrous to read about the smile. I love to make people smile, do you know?
Myra
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What a beautiful message and a well written rhyming poem, it has such a great flow.
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Hallo John
Sorry I did not respond in writing to your comment. I appreciate you reading my work.
Myra
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I so relate to this "Not enough paper, I write on the sky." Its all just so beautifully put! Im coming back for that youtube link. Dankie vir die.
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Sorry I did not notice this comment ...
I must have been offline for a long time!
Thank you so much for reading my work.
Love
Myra
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I am sorry I missed ths comment ...
Thank you so much for reading ... Baie dankie ... die plesier is myne.
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Has a light and lovely bounce to it and so true not only in religion
but also in life itself "there's blindness in sight" for to often the wants
of the heart overcome the needs of it...
Hugs...Eddy
I came through back door to save you points on featured one but
couldn't find so picked another, and a good "choice" it was...
pun intended...
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Hallo Eddy ...
Sorry I did not notice your comment earlier. Thank you so much for not forgetting me. Love to you, Poet.
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I really love the freedom expressed in this...with such a quirky flow and choice of words, which adds splendidly to the care-free feeling of the piece.
Ah, to take charge for one's own happiness...that only the true road!
I also see the introspection in this...and the juxtaposition of the opposites really contrasted wonderfully...almost to glorify life to the fullest, only possible in the presence of death.
Wonderful write!
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Thank you so much ...
for your warm and insightful comment. icyrose.
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I loved this poem greatly!
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I am so glad you did!
Thank you for reading my work.
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Ooh
Crop circles and a song in rhymes. How lovely...I Iive for you, mine. -c
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Yes?
Tell her ... she would love it!
Thank you for reading and commenting.
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Very good [: 3 applause.
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Thank you so much ...
for reading and applauding. I appreciate seeing you here.
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WOW...this is absolutely beautiful. Very spiritual...I love it!
Congratulations on the Gold trophy...very well deserved.
Love and hugs,
Annie
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Thank you, Annie ...
and also for the messages of hope you post on this website.
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wowww i liked it !
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El dia ...
I am so glad you liked this. Thank you for reading and commenting.
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Beautiful - I'm glad this was featured so that I could read it again.
"There's life and there's death and wisdom too late."
This is our tragedy, I think, but you find the solace for us. :
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Thank you, Margaret, beloved friend ..
It is such a joy to have you here.
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amazing I loved it..
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Thank you very much, nunu26 ...
I am grateful for your visit.
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this is truly beautiful; the words are so simple, but so peaceful, and the way it reads is very calming and just so lovely.
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What a lovely name you have!
Marianne Therese ... I am glad that you liked my poem.
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Exellent! I see why you won the gold! I saw this listed in the "spotlight" on the home page and I just had to read it...I'm so glad I did! Pam
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Thank you, Pam ...
I was not aware that the poem is in the spotlight. I should go see who promoted this? Nevertheless, thank you so much for reading and commenting!
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WoW
This is an amazing poem. It is very beautiful. Keep up with the hard work.
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Thank you so much ...
for reading my work -- I am sorry I did not see this comment.
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Hallo MacDaddy13 ...
welcome to my page. Thank you for your zesty comment!
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What a gorgeous poem! Yes, there is great solace in love. This piece flows so well. Effective rhyme. I really enjoyed reading. Congratulations on a well-earned gold.
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Thank you PB
for this comment that I did not respond to in writing. Must have been a hectic time for me. But I did rate it five stars!
Hope you are fine!
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Ah PB. Good to see you.
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Kindest regards to you too!
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Unending Faith
Your words and form are beautiful
Your 'Faith is even more so.
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Thank you for this lovely comment ...
and may I add, then: my friend Donnz is even more beautiful.
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Devine
sweet surrender, Love Devine, in search of the answers Love is mine.
Such a wonderful message ~love~,
the ultimate choice for self and practice.
Darmok
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Ah ... Good to see you, Darmok ...
How are you?
Thank you for reading and commenting. I truly appreciate it.
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The simplicity of being and accepting,
being true to your self brings joy
beautiful and uplifting
I am gad I stopped by
God bless you my friend...
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Thank you for your kind comment ...
and for the blessings. Right back to you! Love Myra
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This is just stunning. Congrats on your gold here. Very well done indeed. I love this piece a lot.
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Thank you so much, Kari.
It is good to see you around.
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and pic too myra,,honestly.? what am i like? x
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Ah.
You look EXACTLY like ... YOU!
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MEADOWS..you are a romantic..they are gone...but daisies and buttercups are in your mind x
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Ah thank you Peter for reading ...
and now ... you changed your name again ... Peter 'o Tool?
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Thank you, Friend ...
for the comment and for visiting -- I appreciate it.
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dreamy in truth
You could have stopped at solace, love capitalized it. Only I would say this to one of your great talent, but
you are almost perfect and I still see the endless pain of your life. Love
theasp
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A very endearing comment ... Thank you!
theasp ... The sorrow of my life has made me who I am ... but the happiness too! I know this life is temporary and it gives me intense hope. Thank you for being gentle.
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Superb writing!
Good morning dear friend, oh how I've missed reading your muse!
As ever, your meter and rhyme are impeccably done. And I'm left with two viewing screens.
One as the Creator looking down at all he's created, and no matter what has befallen, the unconditional love for all.
The second and most powerful is the reflection of Self -- the assuredness of making the right choices in life. Metaphorically speaking - A soul most in tune!
A most wonderful rendering of ink.
Congratulations on this Well deserved Gold!
Love and many blessings,
Sandi
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Thank you so much, Sandi ...
so good to see you ... will read you tonight. LOVE to you.
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Ahhh, this is in classic form lass.
Articulate wording and just great rhythm to piece.
Sort of slides in on the priphial side of the brain and settles comfortably.
This is Art.
Me Irish grand ma used to tell me,
Lowell...
Write something grand,
for you may be
entertaining Angels
Unaware.
She was always right.
Peace always,
LOWELL POE
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Hallo Lowell ...
Thank you for your kind and divine comment. I loved it.
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A wonderfully lyrical poem. I can see why it took gold. I liked your word choice and the way the similes were presented. My favorite line was
"There's life and there's death and wisdom too late."
Wisdom to late. Us poets are always trying to offer our wisdom to a younger generation before its to late. Unfortunately, the young think themselves immortal.
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Ah DennisP1 ...
but the young IS immortal ... and we too!
Thank you for reading.
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A beautiful write...of strength of self. Great job, beautiful imagery.
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Thank you ...
I am glad you liked this write, Nevadapoet.
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Did anyone ever tell you that you have exceptional talent in rhyming poetry. It's impressive I tell you.
This is precise and eloquent.
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I am glad you liked it Jaden ...
it is not easy to impress you I tell you.
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Beautiful
I was grabbed from the first line and just immersed myself in the imagery that flowed as i continued. Great Write
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< Thank you so much, FB ...
for being on my page ... and for your very kind comment.
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I am glad you were open to the poem ...
and its message. Thank you so much for your kind comment.
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Exquisite!
I was drawn into it by the first line I read. Very compelling and powerful, I must say!
My life is to dying what love is to hate.
There's life and there's death and wisdom too late.
I'll find all the answers when at Heaven's gate.
The solace is mine. Love divine.
Final choice mine.
Very creative imagery! Congrats on the gold!
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I love it! I love the flow of it, the way it rhymes, and most of all the meaning behind it. Great job.
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< Ah DD Sai ...
I am glad both structure and content pleased you. Thank you for the zesty comment.
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