Feathery floating
defining hand of air and wind,
taking my eye
leaving thoughts in its
wistful arcing stream;
greater than weight of care
ponderous ‘pon scales of sin
lording love, massive ‘neath meanings
falling free, ‘til caught in life’s flimsy covers;
Fault might task a feather’s fate
as worldly wells of gravity, sag and bend.
A contest entry
- feather by Utok Bulinaw.
410 points, ended January 10, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The reflective quality of this one allows the reader to chance the freefall for fate, for beautiful uncertainties. It makes one stop, suspended in air searching for meanings. This is weightless but pulls like gravity at the same time. Thank you for entering.
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Brilliant Writer of Deep Throughts
Watching it flutter to the ground, I see some poets as feathers...delightful to read just like watching the flight of a feather afloat.....I enjoyed your write...especially the last two lines.......
novy
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Smooth, effective write.
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And as a feather ends its flight,
a heart is heard to break,
for beauty cannot last forever,
time prescribes its fate
Love, C
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Thank you Chez
Some wonderful poetry here... thank you...PK
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Beautiful
This poem is absolutely beautiful I love the 2nd stanza the most, and you ended it so strongly, and giving a very peaceful way and soothing in the beggining, yet still powerful, just marvelous
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Fault might task a feather's fate, gravity sag and bend! Great ending to such a wonderful poem!
~Sie Good luck in your contest!@
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Sigh~
WHat a way to end such a poem!
"Fault might task a feather’s fate
as worldly wells of gravity, sag and bend. "
Once again, you leave me amazed
Lynda
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