I need to know if this love is true
I need to know from you
I put my heart in soul into this
And never do I get one kiss
I wanna know that you still care
I wanna you hurting me you wouldnt dare
Needing right now is you holding me in your arms
Like when we first met your sweet notes and charms
I need you like no other
I feel I can never love another
But if you choose to leave me
I guess It'll just have to be
But theres one thing I have to do
I need to say this : I WILL ALWAYS LOVE YOU
In a list
A contest entry
- What ever comes from the heart by oldphotosonlybringt.
360 points, ended January 26, 2008, 21 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest?
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Ah, don't you love it when you make an error trying to fix someone elses? I meant to say that Line 3 should be "I put my heart and soul into this."
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This poem is good but there are a couple typos I found...
Line 3 "I put my heart in soul into this" should be "I put my and soul into this"
Also, Line 6 "I wanna you hurting me you wouldnt dare" doesn't quite make sense.
Other then that the flow was good and the rhyme was good. Overall, it's a very sweet and yet tragic piece. -
Amazing poem sweetie so a finalist thats 4sure thanks for shareing such a great poem love lots endless...xxx
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Gracias Mucho laters
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great flow and rhyme yet again. my fave live has got 2 be
Like when we first met your sweet notes and charms
great line. Keep up the good writes
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aww this is good a lot of emotions! very good...I'v never been in a relationship so I can't help u out wish I could...keep ur head up...
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thanx so much relationships are hard but it'll be worth it you sound pretty smart to not have ever been in one just waitin for the right one I presume? yeah I should probably do that too after this last go round ://
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This is from real experience and unfortunately he did leave but I'm trying to bounce back ://
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