his mouth came down onto mine
slanting without difficulty
had it been this long since id kissed?
the last time, id felt nothing like
the heat of desire overcoming me now
his tounge caressed my lips briefly
before twining around mine
seeking my mouths depths with ruthless sensuality
my heart pounded so fiercely
i knew he could feel its pulse in my mouth as i responded...
pulling him closer and digging my nails into his back
he deepened the kiss further
until he sucked gently on my tongue
everything inside me began to throb with need
i returned the gesture with more intensity
drawing on his tongue with erotic hunger
my legs felt almost rubbery
and lights danced in my head
playing with fire, kissing the dead
'i wont bite' he assured me before
he propelled me to the back wall
clear of the dance floor
my hair tumbled in my face from the speed of his action
he brushed it away to kiss me again
and this kiss was somehow better then before
his whole body seemed to be poured into his searching mouth
my self control was out of the window
and my arms went around his neck because i needed more
after another few dizzying moments,
he broke the kiss to whisper in my ear
'i love you'
A contest entry
- THE PERFECT KISS by Whispering Wind.
800 points, ended January 10, 2008, 41 entries
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Honorable mention
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Thats a hot kiss ~ your imagery is dead on ~ I could see everything as if it was right there before me ~ You described it so ~ erotically ~ Nice job
Thanks for entering the "Set the Bar" contest ~ I really appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ Best of luck to you!!! -
Kisses like this are few and far between. I loved the way you wrote this, the wording of your lines and the layout.
Brilliant poem, poet. -
Yep, sounds like a Vampire. (LOL) Liked the erotic in this work, people wonder how things happen, I think this explains why. The "ids" bugged me, if you don't use apostrophes maybe you should change the spelling to: "eid" or, "ide" or, "eyed" (LOL); after all an id is something, why I have a poem written about an id right here at AP ¦:¬{
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Please submit another poem. This is a love poem, right? I don't know if you read the rules of my contest, but you should have, and I specifically requested NO LOVE POEMS. Submit another if you care to.
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Ok, firstly, what option is this? It's not really very clear.
Secondly, it's good but it didn't really do anything for me. Like I can appreciate it's pretty well written and everything, but I didn't like it that much, though some of the imagery you use is very good. Oh and there's a few typos in there you might wanna check out, also capitals at the start of the lines might improve it visually, for me at least. So yeah, well done, thanks for entering and good luck =]
Hannu xx -
Wow!
Hot Poem
It Sounded Good, Try Some Capitals Though [Just A Thought] -
WELL OK THEN
Now that is one hunger kiss! Found myself holding my breath! then a break to say I love you...those magic words...sighs...thank you so much for entering
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This is amazing. If i was judging this contest, you would win. I love vampyres.
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wow,this is one hot poem lol i love it!
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i like this. Granted, when i first opened it i was prepared for something a bit darker, since you titled it Vampire Kiss. But once i got into it it made much more sense. Its a very sweet poem. It fits the contest rules perfectly. Good luck with winning, and thanks for a great poem.
XOXO~dreamwriter
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