Crimson
Mystical,smile
Touching,sipping,breathing,
She completes this sleeping passion
Desire
A contest entry
- chanson: songs of love and wine by Nicolette.
900 points, ended January 20, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A lovely cinquain this is and the title wraps up the visuals and emotions you've managed to put into your poem. The syllable count is perfect too. For someone who is new to writing cinquains you really did an amazing job (perhaps you've used too many "-ing" words), but I really liked the subtle sensuality and passion here!
Thank you for this lovely entry.
~ Nicolette
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Cabernet...I love saying it, lol. A touch of magic in this.
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Ummm Yes this is very beautiful with just the perfect sensual tone. Best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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what a beautiful Cabernet cinquain this is! good luck in the contest...
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I adore your pic, which, in counterpoint with the title, forms a marvelous image in the mind; however, you may wish to check your syllable count. There is a link given in the rules which includes a site where you can do this.
The content of your poetry here is lovely and potent, and I really like that aspect of it.
Thank you for your entry, and good luck.
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Fixed. Thanks for the heads up.I am new to Cinquains
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perfecto !!
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