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The Book

 

 

 

In a crowded time

strewn with half hopes

and long wishes,

I was trapped between broken

sliding doors

 

 

You found me,

dragged at the core of my being,

turning it

inside out

 

 

Hidden depths of me

displayed,

like a secret library of

gathered fragments

of lost thoughts

 

 

You saw the misarranged words

in my head,

stories

not yet written,

and placed each word

carefully into a wonderful new book

 

 

But the paper cuts

were razor sharp,

lies bled like spilled ink;

now life is tightly packed

with fear and bitterness

 

 

And the beauty of the book

is so fragile,

tomorrow’s touch

will crumble it

to fine ashes,

waiting to be blown away

on another promise

of wasted breath

 

 

 

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 5, 2008

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    It happens..because the life and love both are unpredictable..and one can relate with it..you have shared your inside with the readers here with your wonderful poetic words..well done...

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 1, 2008
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    Thank you for your deeply heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie

  • CacTile Soup
    February 2, 2008
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    Nice work there is a subtlity to your work that is hard to find


  • HeavenonEarth
    February 1, 2008

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    This was hauntingly beautiful. It speaks of colors that we sometimes wish were never made, this evokes so many emotions, an exquisite write.

    "You saw the misarranged words
    in my head, stories
    not yet written"

    The Mind has a way of creating such stories that trip our beautiful spirit up.
    May your spirit be stronger than your mind, as I know it already is.

    Just beautiful!
    Much love and Many blessings~
    ~Joy


  • Floorboards
    January 17, 2008

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    Wow, Jan, this is excellent. 'twas like someone whispering to me as I read it, loved it. Would love it even more if those[if !supportemptyParas]--etc would disappear, hehe,
    the ending is fantastic,
    well done my friend,
    Alex.

  • magneticblue
    January 14, 2008

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    This has some very beautiful imagery, and the overall idea is powerful and creatively displayed. The way you worded some passages (especially in the second and third stanzas) was pleasant to read. Thank you for entering and good luck.

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