pain calls to her like a sweet song
resist resist she cant
her soul is cracked and scarred
because you withdrew the innocence
because you stole the happiness
because you are the sadisic one
who undid the purity
it once lay within the depths of her heart
but that was broken and played with,
like a childs toy
so pain calls to her like a sweet song
she follows it like its minion
and it turned out to be you on the piano
it turned out to be you who drew into the darkness
you pursuaded her into shame
you, the charming hades
you,the brutal knight
are a natural born soul reeper
A contest entry
- You have COMPLETE CREATIVE FREEDOM!!!!!!!! by Twosoulsasone.
465 points, ended January 23, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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It is ok, I like it, I am thinking about it and what not.
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I like...Not my thing thou..but all in all not a bad write
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please follow contest instructions on authors notes!!
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It says fiction
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o i see sorry about that
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its alright
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Brilliant
Ok, I like this a lot. This is dark deep and foreboding. I agree, it is also beautiful and the reader can feel the emotion and power behind this. It is like a descent into darkness. Well done for this.
All the best
Wayne Leon
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wow. this is an awesome write. it's very dark, deep, and beautiful. i can feel the pain in this poem. excellent write.
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dark .. love it .. very deep and jst beautiful
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This was an absolutly beautiful write. I just loved everything about it. Good luck in the contest.
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