What am I to do, when death comes knocking
Should I lock up tight...
Or just graciously open the door
What do I do when the pain is unbearable
When my aching bones just can't take anymore
Should I end it now...
or just keep awaiting my time
Living this life is hard...
but what if it is the only one I have got
If there are no rainbows or angels on the other side
I want to keep going forever
though I don't know if that will be the case
What if this pain is want is granted to me
Bearing this mark...
it brings me no shame
It only causes me to question my faith
A faith that I cannot...
relinquish
No matter how hard this road becomes
A contest entry
- Round One of Five by Kei-Aira.
450 points, ended February 5, 2008, 27 entries
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Comments
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Your words ring of strongly held thoughts and ideas, and emotions throughtout this piece. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
♥ Touchof1der -
Join the screwed up club
I feel it twenty four seven. I think you might get used to it in time
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I like the first stanza, the way in which you discuss what to do when the reaper arrives. Knowing what your decision will be whatever the circumstance. You contemplate an ending knowing that it is not within you to make that decision. Even though you know not what awaits on the "other side", you have the drive to continue on. This is the sort of work that makes the issues that surround seem pale.
Very good.
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i like this poem- to me it is quite philosophical and that means a lot to me. very deep poem, full of true emotions, i like ur work vass thus far
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