As I look at myself in the mirror,
I feel there’s nothing left in me.
I have no conscience or wisdom,
I feel so closed in here.
Just look at yourself once again…
I see the tear going down your face,
You believe that nothing else remains.
Don’t give up, you can win this race.
Stop with your hope!
I feel everything is gone…
I’m locked with no home,
I feel sad and so lone.
That’s why you need to hold on.
Sad times won’t least forever...
Believe you can move on.
Don’t give up, it will be better.
I’ve tried hard already!
I just see no way or exit.
I want to jump and give up, I’m ready…
I don’t need to suffer, I claim mercy.
God hasn’t forgotten,
You’re just going through hard times…
Live with what you've gotten,
Don’t leave everything behind.
But I want everything behind!
Every time I try, I fall.
And I’m tired of this life,
It’s unfair and nothing kind.
No one said life was easy,
If you fall you can stand up.
Don’t ditch everything you silly,
Cuz there's no coming back.
I doubt in my faith,
I've got no more complains.
God forgets what I pray,
Leaving me dying in pain.
Sometimes you got to run,
But never give up
In dark there’s always sun
Good times will soon return.
Author notes
This poem is a conversation between a person who have lost faith in life and in God, and their inner conscience.
A contest entry
- Round 2 reply: Faith by DarkWind.
600 points, ended January 30, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think?
Comments
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great job
It flows well and follows the rules of the contest quite well while hitting what I really wanted from the finalists. however there are some spelling and grammar goofs that I will point out 1)in line 22 through i think would flow better. 2)in line 34 it should be I've 3) in line 35 god forgot my prayers.
asides that it was a marvolous poem.
May the stars always light your path.
DW
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thank you so much for your comment and for ur words. ill correct the mistakes right away when i come back home!! thank youuuu
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