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Blue Souls

 

Loss of interest, diminished mood,
for days I sit, for days I brood.
Bleak despair washes over my soul,
on the inside I am no longer whole.

The elusive void grows forever wide,
happiness for me has been denied.
Sinking deeper into the somber abyss,
wishing I could elevate this awful mist.

Hope fades each and every night,
at the tunnels end there is no light.
Lost within my endless fatigue,
death now holds major intrigue.

Cannons sound within my mind,
it seems the light I will never find.
Restless now of this daily toil,
praying soon to be one with the soil.

 

 

 

Author notes

option 1, I would like you to prove me wrong. Explain the feeling of wanting to curl up on the ground and never get up again.

"I have read the rules, understand, and agree to abide by them."

6) Write about mental illness, such as Depression, Anxiety, etc.

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  • Jade-
    January 21, 2008

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    Hey,

    This is a wonderful piece! It gets inside the subject really well, and the emotions are raw. Your flow was flawless and you chose some powerful words. It was interesting to read from start to finish...I didn't get bored. I do wish it was longer though!

    Thanks for entering, and good luck.

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  • quietmonster
    January 19, 2008

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    This rhymes and scans so beautifully I was left wanting more, but it's perfect as it is. Although it deals with a deep, dark topic the execution is so intelligent and effective the poem is wonderfully accessible and enjoyable.


  • Salig gold member
    January 11, 2008
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    I couldn't have said it better myself. Excellent job. Thank you for entering.


  • CherryOnTop gold member
    January 8, 2008

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    I love your border and good luck in the contest...Now this is so real.if I didn't know better I would really be worried Wonderful sad poem full of depth...