no longer do I chase butterflies,
or feel their flutter in my stomach
my bones creak, and my skin
is the dried like jerky
my mind tells me,
it will never grow old
yet-
I see God in Heaven, tapping his toe
waiting for this struggle,
to be over.
A contest entry
- and heaven can't wait 10 x 10 by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended January 9, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congratulations on the Gold trophy it was well deserved your piece is great.
RedwingSpirit
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Oh stupendous job with meeting the prompt/ You language and expression is awesome.
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I saw the contest and was inspired, then saw my friend Mally and had to read what you wrote, and now, I decided there is nothing more brilliant I could possibly say
so I bow out to the best
...You have said it all with this poem....Amazing...shining this is!
Lynda
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you should still enter lynda...its all about poetry...yours
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I had to go back and look at the picture that inspired this witty write. It's all about time, isn't it-whether we like it or not-we can't control it.
This left me smiling-although I think you have many good yrs up ahead of you-(all wrinkled and dried up-I doubt it!)
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Vicky Jayyyyyyyyyy How are you girl...been a while......yep im all dried up... and before I forget...Wishing You and family a Very Happy New Year...
chop chop...
Mal
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This is a lovely poem, my friend and it reflects Dali's painting so very well. Those last lines are just amazing.. loved the sense of time and rhythm here!
~ Nicolette
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So is you girlie...
amazing
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While this is a sometime shared though I too envision of myself.He may be toe tapping because we haven't gotten the message of how he's gifted us with all the beauty his creations in life aren't comprehended yet by us. Boy! You've nailed Dali's title and vision in that painting to the gate of heaven in posting this piece.
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Big Hug for you girl...
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great job on this poem, the space called heaven is awaiting us all but we live life to the fullest to the end...good luck in this contest..mm
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Wow...three bunnies from you moons...
lol thanks bunches...
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interresting take on this picture the begining I did not relate with the picture nor the poem than you finished it off nicely, Loved these lines!
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I see God in Heaven, tapping his toe
waiting for this struggle,
to be over.
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yep...he is also tapping his fingers...tap tap tap...
thanks for commenting...
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Wow..this just blew me away. The total piece just created a visual that was extraordinary.
Good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
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you flatter me girl...but im loving it...more more...
yum yum
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