Adopted into the blissful obscurity of heaven
Where time seems to melt into puddles
Buried beneath the moving sands
There lies our history, untold tales
Beyond these remedies time melts
Minutes seem to be seconds
And seconds seem to be hours
Linen laces adhesive mud
As time melts though my golden fingers
In this holy place my body has become
Irreclaimable
A contest entry
- and heaven can't wait 10 x 10 by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended January 9, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh loved the ending lines....beautifully done.
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This was both beautiful & deep.
Enjoyed the read.
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awwwwwww
this is much better love it now! excellent write
and wonderful take on this prompt!
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Thank you
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I can't see how this describes heaven, but I can see it describing a haven. It's got brilliant imagery and best of luck in the contest!
I remember this picture from somewhere - but I can't remember who it's by...
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I cant believe I missed that bit... 
Thank you for the comment though.
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nice changes Best of luck in this contest!
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Oh no.
I kinda missed that bit.
But I fixed it...
Thank you for your comment
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wonderful!I'm speechless!bravo!good luck in the contest!
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This is very nice I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
REDWINGSPIRIT
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