Can you hear the voice
a voice so cold
so full of saddness
so alone
so full of fear
can you hear the voice
a voice so full of love
so warm
but still so alone
you made yourself known
believed in me in whatever I want to be
you let me run
you let me fly
you let me be me
Nanny you left me
I feel cold, alone
I'm afraid
you gave me courage
why did you have to go
it is so dark
turn on the light
make me whole agian
when i see poppy i still look for you
knowing you wont be there
wake me from this bad dream
hold me in your arms
make me feel at home again
I'm losing everyone who cares for me
i need to know
just why did you leave
I never said goodbye
never told you i'd miss you
you never said i love you to me
if you saw me now you think
i'm some one else
i'm still hurting but im better
Im on my own
Im my own person
I know you watch over us all
You keep us safe
Instead of being my nanny
You are my guardian angel
I love you
So now I can finally say
I may miss you but good bye
My guardian angel
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have you ever lost some one you love a lot and knew you never get back think about that time does this poem make you think about them at all?
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i have lost several ppl that i luved alot n dis poem made me think a whole lot about dem!!!!
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This is such a sad poem, but also filled with joy. Joy of finally finding yourself. It may be slow, but we'll all find our way, eventually.
Well done!
Nela
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Thank you for your entry! This is a nice dedication. I have a few changes (grammatical, typographical etc...) that I need to suggest to make this poem "book ready".
In line 3, there is a typo, I think that "ao" was meant to be "so".
In line 28, "loosing" should be "losing".
In line 32, "i'd" should have a capital "I" : "I'd". And in all other parts of the poem, the "i" should be capitalized.
In line 34, I'm not sure, but I think you meant to type "If you saw me now you'd think..." It sounds more grammatically correct to type "you'd think".
Let me know what you think. Thanks again for your entry.
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wow... this poem brought me to tears, but near the end i was able to soak them back up.. im sorry you lost your nanny, i can see that you were really close to her.. i dont think i can replace something like that. you seem like a great person, and I'd love for you to be in my family..
please read the rules though.
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Lovely
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