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On Solid Ground

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I've climbed the stairs to heaven
too many times to count,
I've battled many demons
in my world of the lost and found.

Times I've made it to the top,
needed a helping hand;

to pull me to perfection,

I could not seem to stand.

I stumbled back a step or two,
had fallen to the ground;
I told myself I had fought too hard,
I will not lose this round.

I stood back up wiped away my tears,

proceeded to the top;

fear had caused me to look back,

to recognize the drop.

Overwhelmed and startled,
my legs began to shake;

I lost my footing once again,
but realized my mistake.

Look straight ahead, don't look back;
kept playing in my head,
it has kept me on my journey,

Though I've not made it yet.

I continue to climb to solid ground,
to make it through the door;

though many battles have been lost,

I will not lose this war.

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  • etoile
    August 11
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    no, sorry
    I'm not a huge fan of rhyme.
    this is well written though.
    thanks for entering


  • dieu.
    August 11
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    no


  • new born
    August 9
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    poets anonymous: no.


  • alaska.
    August 7
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    poets anonymous: sorry, but no.


  • Lyrical Rain
    June 18, 2008

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    Beautiful.............. You are absolutely right. The VICTORY in the end always belongs to us. I loved this.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    June 11, 2008
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    I love your last two lines most especially-thanks for your entry and good luck lol


  • CarCrashHumor
    May 28, 2008

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    wow this seems actually very well attended to... like clean and edited nicely, while maintaining the personal aspect.

    great job; I really liked reading this. and also, I can relate...! thanks for entering


  • ourgirlFriday
    May 24, 2008

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    Wow!

    I love this poem! It counters the desperation with determination, something I've lost over the years. Well Done. Stanza 2, line 1, 'times' needs to be capitalized; but other than that it's fine. Easy to verlook. Best of luck in the contest!


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    March 4, 2008

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    Wonderful....

    If I may I'd like to give you an edit as I've noticed how doing so has helped me to improve. I'm a better editor for other's work, but I'm getting better at my own as well! Edit:
    I've climbed the stairs to heaven
    too many times to count,
    I've battled many demons
    in my world of lost and found.

    Times I made it to the top
    Needed a helping hand,
    to pull me to perfection
    I couldn't seem to stand.

    Stumbling back a step or two
    Falling to the ground,
    Telling myself I'd fought too hard
    I'll not lose this round.

    I stood back up wiping away my tears
    Proceeded to the top,
    Fear causing me to look back
    Recognize the drop.

    Overwhelmed and startled
    my legs began to shake,
    I lost my footing once again
    Realizing my mistake.

    Look straight ahead, don't look back
    kept playing in my head,
    it's kept me on my journey
    though I've not made it yet.

    I continue to climb to solid ground
    to make it through the door,
    and though many battles have been lost
    I will not lose this war.


  • gladyspshaw57
    March 1, 2008

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    TOTALLY

    This poem reminds me of my life. Thank you for the reminder,and the encouragement through your writting.


  • bliss-inaction3
    February 25, 2008
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    i absolutly love this poem you go girl....keep up the great work.....!!!


  • TheWiseShallSuffer
    February 7, 2008

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    i love this poem, i can, and i'm sure many others can relate to it, thankyou for your comment on my poem, God bless.


  • beisekergirl
    January 31, 2008

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    You go girl! your so right, we try and try again, lose our footing, but the lord he lifts us up again, to linger in his arms is my one desire, and through writing like this it makes that dream all the brighter!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    January 30, 2008
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    Excellent

    You have a great message to tell and you tell it well


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    January 30, 2008
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    Upon the "Solid Rock" I stand--Great Hymn and you are a great writer!!

  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    January 30, 2008

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    Excellent

    Thank you again for your kind feedback--Please be sure to click on my poem entitled "A Buried Treasure"--That is my testimony and was written while I was in Vietnam many years ago--Thanks Again--You are an awesome talent
    AL

  • Virginia Logsdon
    January 11, 2008

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    Great poem for your statement of faith!

    We press forward, with our eyes on the prize-our ears deaf to the enemies lies-{to quote from one of my poems.}If we keep our eyes on Jesus, we can walk on water!

  • goalsv
    January 10, 2008
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    Awesome piece. It brings out so perfectly that in our quest for Heaven we look away to much from Jesus and that causes us to stumble. If we would keep looking at Him we will win this war. When Peter walked on the water he only sank when he turned and looked at the storm.


  • superstition
    January 9, 2008

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    I've read your author's page as well as this poem and genuinely welcome you back to the world of writing!! By the looks of this write, you have already been welcomed back by your gift with words. This write is beautiful, and it's inspirational at the same time! Everyone takes falls in life, but all that matters is how you rise up from the ground. If you rise back up in fear, you've been defeated already. If you rise back up in confidence and eagerness, you shall proceed to the next level. Keep writing for you're doing very well!!


  • Princess Adele
    January 9, 2008

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    As soon as I read the first line, I felt butterflies in my stomach. I felt like it was me writing this poem. This is a very inspirational poems for teens and people of all ages. I love it.......


  • ShadyLass
    January 9, 2008
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    A poem I'm sure everyone can relate to, I know I can. I agree that this poem is like a prayer and an affirmation. I find a lot of comfort in reading this because the words are so honest and true. Truly we never should stop fighting that war. Wonderful poem.
    ~Amanda~


  • Jalalbad gold member
    January 8, 2008
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    many battles have been lost and won - no the war will not be lost


  • princehusayn
    January 8, 2008

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    determination hope excellent

    Medicine for healing and moving forward. This write is an affirmation a prayer a meditation something from the unmanifested to the reality. I would say it is empowering. Yes and very relevant because that which is coming to the masses will need more prayers because the future looks dim. These writes of this calibre will be the healing medicine for now and days to come. Excellent write and thank you for sharing.


    • Pisces rainbow gold member
      January 8, 2008
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      THANK YOU FOR READING AND COMMENTING, MORE PRAYER IS ALSO EMPOWERING GOD BLESS

  • Little20Rookie
    January 8, 2008
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    i really love it

    i really love this poem, its such an honest right, it talks about your struggles and sometimes when you fall short and somehow pay attention to all the things you have left behind, but you don't want that feeling anymore, and you realize your fault and keep on climbing. awesome right, i really love it its really inspiring.


    • Pisces rainbow gold member
      January 8, 2008
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      THANK YOU FOR YOUR COMMENT. YOU ARE INDEED RIGHT ON WITH YOUR TRANSLATION gOD BLESS

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