Take flight my heart
far over the sea
I've failed and wounded him
and never again we shall be
How do I speak to him
if I don't know what to say?
How can my pen reach him
if I keep casting my writes away?
How do I forgive myself,
for hurting my one true love?
How can I face him now?
May I ask for help from above?
Why did I...?
My reasons flies out to sea.
This time 'round, the fault is all on me.
I pray this letter finds you.
though I have no words to say.
I know that I have hurt you,
Please bring my heart to bay.
Tell me you still love me
And that we'll be okay.
Take flight my heart, my love, my soul -
And return to me some day.
Find me, make me whole
Please come back, I pray!
Author notes
"to bay"
To be safely on the shore, away from wildering winds and storm.
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In reverse I would like to edit the quote :
"Losing devotion... Finding emotion"
A contest entry
- Anything and everything-prewrites allowed-2nd contest by Midgetbridgey.
350 points, ended July 11, 280 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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What a beautiful sentimental piece of writing. It is something everyone must have felt at one time or another. The wish that the one we love would come back and love us again. The wish it could all be renewed somehow, and the pain that we realise we brought on that person and the consequences of our actions being the agony we must endure at our loss.
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This is another wonderful write, deeply sad and so easy to relate to. Whenever something goes wrong with someone you love, you always go through the different scenarios in your head; 'perhaps it would be different if I said that', 'maybe if I didn't do that, everything would be alright'. You show this by the questions you ask through-out the piece.
The things that have been done or said have been that way for a reason, try not to think about what has happened as I'm sure it's not all on you.
I hope you are alright and things can be resolved, I wish you luck with this.
You create such beautiful poetry. x xx
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Your comment makes me cry. thank you so much for the kind words and thank you for this beautiful comment!
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oh wow i love this. i hate feeling that i have hurt he people that i love. thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Well-written poem ...
of lost love, which is such a universal topic, that most can relate to it. Read almost as a letter of regret.
Good work.
Yes I am in South Africa, too -- I am from Eden, George.
Amera told me about you, and Maa you about me, so I guess we are destined to meet. 
Blessed be, Poetess!
Myra
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The simplicity of lines hides the skill inherent in such a deeply felt poem. This manages sentiment without the mawkishness that so often bedevils such writings.
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NOw this write is wonderful and full of meaning and shows your hearts ache, this one is a inspiration
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I am in awe. I love it. I can feel the emotion as i read. Great job!
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very beautiful and so full of love and emotion. I could feel your heart come out for your true love and hopes to save what once was. Great job here and thanks for entering!
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This is a beautiful poem! I am glad I saw this.. I have not read much lately so this was nice to see. Thanks for the wonderful presence you presented here.
~Krys~
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Wow...this piece could shake a hard stone...the sadness and the longing emotions are very sincere...and most especially the 'letting go' part afer you've accepted your situation...thank you for sharing this very heartfelt write...
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wow i am going speechless
before i could ru out of words to praise your well-written/enchanting poem i must say this could be my love at first sight piece..sooooo outstanding! wow..it is lol one more word to express how i feel when i read this poem is remarkable (i do feel sad when i read this..surely he would forgive u if he read this superb write) ....remarkable..i said it.
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I remember this, thank you for entering.
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Lovely poetry. I hope he loves you enough to forgive you Rebekah. I know it will be hard for him, but you would do that for him in a heart beat. I know you, and know how much you adore him.
He's not so innocent in this. If he showed the least bid to interest and gave you more of his time this whole thing would never have happened...
All the best!
love you
Charmaine
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It's very painful to lose someone you hold so dear to your heart because of something that's based on who you are...
This write is filled with sadness, and the painful side of being in love...
I hope things will get better for you soon!
Leander -
make me whole...!
This is lovely... even if there is a lot of sadness and wistful emotion in it. Excellent!
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This is such a touching and heartfelt cry out to your love. this has been written so beautifully, it took my breath away. the emotion you have expressed here is outstanding. Well done, and my thoughts are with you.
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This is so beautiful and so sad. I can feel the emotion and the honesty in the tone of this poem. I'm glad your muse is back, I missed your poetry.
Love,
Amera♥
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SO TOUCHINGLY SAD!
I feel for you my friend. I'm so aware of this type of pain. I wish you well, this was a very well written piece.
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there is so much sadness in this admission of responsibility for something having gone wrong
. I love the line "take flight my heart, my love, my hope" for by sending it to take flight it might spread its wings and really do return.
Hoping you are well.........so sorry for not having been by your pages in forever-------time has been so limited as of late,
much love
xoxoxo
reenie
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