One magical day
Well what can I say?
Your hand bumped into mine.
The spark I could almost see
As you looked right at me
And we knew that the love was there.
Our eyes met and the message was passed
That the love that we shared was ever so vast
And we knew it would be so forever.
My heart beat wildly
You smiled quite mildly
And the embarrassment was quite clear.
We smiled then looked away
Realizing this was not the day
That we both hoped it would be.
We got up and left
The moment was stolen in an unsavory theft
And the magic was suddenly gone.
Who do I blame?
The one that came
And interrupted your magic touch.
Author notes
Well, thinking again, came across a very fond memory, thought I'd write about it. Yeah...please comment!
A contest entry
- A Special Day by BabyBun.
300 points, ended January 10, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Brandi!
I love this piece!
"We got up and left
The moment was stolen in an unsavory theft
And the magic was suddenly gone."
I don't know why, but that's my favorite line.
Excellent, excellent, excellent
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Thank you!!! I don't like it very much, so it made me really happy to get comments on it, complimenting it. lol
Thanks so much!! : D
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Our eyes met and the message was passed
That the love that we shared was ever so vast
And we knew it would be so forever.
That's my favorite verse in the poem! This poem is totally awesome! I love the feeling that it has and the way that it has the ability to move someone. I hope to see more good poetry from you and to see you around. I always have contests going on, you should enter a poem sometime. I am pretty sure that you will win some!
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Thanks for the awesome comment!
It really makes me happy when people like my poetry!
Yeah, I think I'll go check out your contests sometime!
Thanks again for the comment! :]
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Our eyes met and the message was passed
That the love that we shared was ever so vast
And we knew it would be so forever.
That's my favorite verse in the poem! This poem is totally awesome! I love the feeling that it has and the way that it has the ability to move someone. I hope to see more good poetry from you and to see you around. I always have contests going on, you should enter a poem sometime. I am pretty sure that you will win some!
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Wow, i never had fond memories like this when i was 13 years old.
My memories were, my brother and i, down at the river, he had a frog, i had a frog, and we would race them
On your mark, get set..GO!!!
What's the matter with you? Hop faster!!! Dont make me whip you!
A very magical moment to create a special memory..well done!
Enjoyed!
galfalfa
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Memories
Memories I write a lot about memories some good some bad but they are all part of our lives.
Although your memory only lasted a short time I can see why you would write about it.
Although it ended up sad.
You did a beautiful job. It brought back to memory a poem about a girl I met title "JESSIE LEA" If you get time take a look at it.
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Really cute poem! Thanks for entering and good luck
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