This
one time
while
I was
visiting
my cousin's over
the summer at their
lovely house in Iowa
I
was nine
and still believed in
the Easter Bunny
and
many other
mystical creatures
that parents make up for their children
My
mind
was
fresh and youthfully unbound
I
would play
with a pen when I thought
no one was watching
but
they were
One day
As I stood
out in the front yard
after a lazy breakfast
My older cousin
Mark
was mowing the lawn
using one of those
old-fashioned
push mowers
Real
old school
spinning blades
and all
Too bad
that he didn't notice
as
he was
mowing
That he passed over
a rabbit hole
just when the rabbit
was crawling out
The
Blades
sliced off the fluffy critter's head
Sending it flying
and
Landing right on
my forehead
I renounced my belief
of the Easter Bunny
after that
and
would start to
further question anything else
that my parents told me
I
learned a lot
over that weekend
Author notes
This poem is based off a funny story a friend of my told me in acting class. Wherever that guy is right now I must send my thanks for such good ispiration. Hope you enjoyed it.
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This is creepy.
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Sounds like an unfortunate incident to me.
I'd have been at least a little impressed if this had actually happened to you.
At best, writing it out in this 'form' could have produced something a little unique in straight bold expression, a little like 'a wolf dressed in sheep's clothing' in order to make a point.
That may have been very effective but here, I don't think it works very well, the random line breaks and unnecessary capitalisation just seem irrelevant to me and it doesn't seem to be very imaginative or even that humorous.
To be honest, it's not something I'd choose to stay with for very long and apart from that it has very little relevance to the prompt.
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yeah, doesn't really match the prompt but I just felt like it would be fun. apparently not for you. sorry for ever wasting your time.
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The Easter Bunny is REAL. He is the Son of God.
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I love this comment. It makes me "laff" in such way that I had to spell it some other way. Thank you very much.
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HAHAHAHAH THIS STORY IS STILL! Just as good as the first time I read it! That's hilarious! I thought that happened to you? oh well...anyways that's super funny!
That poor bunny! I would normally cry but this is just too hilarious! Great job writing it...fabulous interpretation...and I give you a lot A LOT of points for style.
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