Goosebumps
meander
their
way
to
my
core,
making me shiver in cold
as I make light tracks in the snow,
my unique footprint follows me,
stalks me.
Tiny, crystalline hearts
flutter down from the heavens
to land,
gracefully on my tongue.
My skirts twirl and swish around my feet,
a sea of blue admist a world of white.
My giggle rings out into the forest,
tall, silent guardians watch over me,
indulging me in my girlish delights.
Author notes
Option #1.
A contest entry
- Winter Time by soccer220.
600 points, ended January 10, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 19 to 25 enter your best prewrites Judged by RedwingSpirit.
850 points, ended January 17, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 154th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended January 15, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Somewhere over the rainbow by Starz of Heaven.
525 points, ended February 14, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i like the layout of the poem it looks nice, it's simple in the begining and in the end but in the middle it is more advanced i like the very slight change in writing sytle
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Such creative use of space; liked the flow and the way the senses are brought into this write. Wonderful metaphors used in these lines - like one can hear the giggles and the swishing skirt. Congrats on the HM in one of the contests.
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Okay, it was a little bit cheesy-
"Tiny, crystalline hearts
flutter down from the heavens"
but overall, I liked the poem. It was very cute and the formatting was well done too. I liked the background also.
Love, Black-Moon -
cute
I think that this is so adorable...
I loved it.
Background is perfect for it. I think it adds to the glory of the poem.
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the line was " a sea of blue admist a world of white." this reminds me of the beach and How I love to sit on the sand a take in the sea. keep on writing.
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This is a very nice piece I like it alot thank you for taking the time to enter my contest best wishes and muhc love always
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I have to say I absolutely adored the structure of this piece... but I have to ask.... what does it take the shape of?
I such at things like that. 
Anyways, this was really well written and very creative. I enjoyed it thank you for entering and good luck.
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It doesn't, really. I just thought it would be neat to make the first sentence meander...since well, it talks about meandering. I never actually though to make it a shape.
I'm glad you liked it
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This has very nice imagery I like what you did with the first lines.
Thank you for taking the time to enter this poem into my contest. I wish you the best of luck.
RedwingSpirit
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Wow! You are a great writer. I am digging this. What you described in this poem I yearn for once again. Thank you for sharing. ~~Shannon~~
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Thank you - I'm glad you've taken the time to stop by my little corner of the world
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wow, really like this!
lovely write
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I definately like the imagery you have capturd in these lines and the way you have presented it to the reader as well
The whole poem creates this playful atmosphere... well done!
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Thank you, Leander
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I love the format..and the playful voice to this
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Wow...this is great! I really like how you shape this poem, without letting it ruin how you want to write it. I really like your descriptions, and how you stay on one topic. Thanks for entering and good luck! Keep writing!
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Thank you. I had wanted to write something, but generally I can't think of topics off the top of my head, so I was browsing the contests.
I'm happy with how it turned out.
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