The world is floating before my eyes
A heart in hand and I'm hypnotized
A flash of color in a grey, bleak sight
A happy shade besides the mild plight
The distance, love, and nothing more
Not even the disappointment you swore
I glow alone and mourn outside
And through this, I shall be your guide
A boost to your emotions, no less
The haunting cold which you have stressed
But not to jinx it and feel woe
To feel joy expected, not the low
You promise me a broken heart
While I give to you a new start
Time away from these fickle fools
A way to start away from cruel
To give a gift with all my power
A chance alone to not devour
And though it is a lowly naught
We'll help the other to avoid the rot
Please tell me what you think
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Love is an escape. Like a book, a cigarette, like sleep, it takes away some of the pain, makes things seem a little brighter. for a time. The poem is good. A little bit hard to wrap my mind around the feelings coming from it; the rhyming seems to get in my way a little, though I'm hardly in a position to talk. Lovely ending lines though.
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I like it, a lot. it's quite an interesting approach to a love poem?
... if i interpreted correctly.
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You interpreted correctly.
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very depressing, but i like it, and very well written...
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