Ecclesiastical country,
intrinsically on its knees
Apocryphal daddy,
feed me more please
Pastoral peace, lived violently
Hermetic hearts beat, without alchemy
Reality, like an assault...
without our real history, occult
Guilty evil, now living without fault
And we, without the eyes to see,
the signs symbolized, not so shyly
Crystallized and carved into our minds
But like a forgotten star that never seems to shine
I resurrect divinity from charred remains,
these bloodless veins
Decipher a cryptic past,
as to not enchain the future
Resurrecting my ancient beekeeper,
waxing balmy
Ecclesiastical country,
intrinsically on its knees
Swindled by undercover neonazis
Hand on heart, I plead
Apocryphal big daddy,
No more, please...
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Whos your daddy?
....an we without the eyes to see,
....the signs symbolized, not so shyly
....crystallized and carved into our minds
....But like a forgotten star
....that never seems to shine....
I think like all your writings this had your crescendoed style with that stanza or two in the center that you make as really ...the center.. or core message....that boldly states its reasoning or foundation,
which in my opinion, is in the true style of any good poetry or story telling.
Your writing is much in the realm of awareness,
bringing forth a message that evil is there...
it exists,
unnoticed and unpunished...be warned...
Fascinating read lass!
Keep on pushin,
straight ahead,
Lowell.
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big vocabulary!
yeah! i wish i wrote the line "Swindled by undercover neonazis" first! lol nice poem ,there is a definate vibe and flow throughout. nice ryhming too. -Jamie
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Balmy Bees Begone!
okay, the rhymes are kicking butt for most of this, but sort of unwinds toward the end in the beekeeper stanza, which, for me, got a little absurd and detracted from the more sinister nature of the poem. Maybe you meant to be light hearted, but for me, this started out as a dark fallen from grace bit, and then got a little silly with the beekeeper "waxing"--pun intended--balmy??? Well, that took me out of the spirit of the thing. But, you are always awesome and write unexpected lines, so I admire you for that, and did enjoy this poem! Take it for what it is worth! Aloha, friend!!!
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Big word user. Already I barely know the first word of the poem meany! 
But it sure sounds good 
. And I'd like to comment on the rhymes, just awesome and not so usual, alchemy and violently go really well together 
. And I like how the beginning was almost the same as the end, but completely different just with the last line, a really nice way to end a great poem
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
A++wesome
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Great
My vocabulary is not staggering, but I understood the emotion behind it. I know and understand many words, but You know how to Use them were as I have trouble with the eloquence of the written word. Goosebumps thanks.
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Interesting, very intense thoughts, followed with very intense choice of words, well written, very eye opening.
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Some wild intense thoughts, organziaed and captured well, a good commentary, artistically done.
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Iffen I read this correctly then I am with you all the way. A thought...chard is beet-like root vegetable....surely you mean charred?
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Are you sure you've had enough?
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pretty damn sure
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3XBRAVO
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