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Glorious Shite

Rejection's refuse cast off as riff-raft

to roll around life's red rigamarole

was falsely given the black end of shaft 

though it hath truest purple to extol

 

 

A contrast for meridians vanilla

subconsciously greened by deepest envy

as tongue fails to malign this stark villa

dipped like the bottom of the letter V

 

 

Every tainted whisper of rumor foul

as gossip compares not to its colors

which contort even the firmly fixed jowl

to ebony which never discolors
 

 

 

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  • Never Fall in Love
    February 23, 2008

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    Oooooooo... I remember this winning against one of my writes! - meanie you

    But all the worth it in my opinion

    Never ♥


  • MyHeartBeatsNoMoreX
    January 16, 2008
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    Very Good

    It sounds really good, i think you have some real potental. By the way i'm iambroken01.

  • Virginia Logsdon
    January 9, 2008
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    Nice work!


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    January 7, 2008

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    00oh i liked this one very much, all the best with the contest my friend xx

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    I have no favorite lines As I love the whole piece goodluck to you in this contest best wishes and much love


  • HeavenScent4U
    January 7, 2008

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    Another very powerful write dripping with emotion. I love the spin on sh*t lol best of luck in the contest beautiful be well and be blessed

    naturally to me, the deepest part of this piece, well maybe not deepest but very well expressed

    "as tongue fails to malign this stark villa
    dipped like the bottom of the letter V"


  • georgie
    January 7, 2008

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    love this piece... the rhyme flowed perfectly and put in such wonderful wording,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


  • TenShadesOfPale
    January 7, 2008

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    You described everything very well. It clearly expresses something deeper than a scar. Your poem is very dark yet beautiful and touching. Very inspiring. Fabulous job! Keep writing with the same feeling!


  • alexandrathegreat
    January 7, 2008

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    Apt alliteration my Mark mate! I worship the line "dipped like the bottom of the letter V" sweet trash! The last stanza gave me the shiver me timbers. You have my vote!


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    an amazing write which holds deep and powerful metaphors within it. well done and best of luck in the contest

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