I was searching for knowledge,
trying to open up
to the greater possibilities
but it left me feeling
like last night's vodka glass
I poured over the reasons why
the accusations
the history
Thinking I was smarter
than you
who sits content
never questioning the authority
But now I am reminded
of unhappy intellectuals
immersed
in mathematical coldness and
scientific detachment
wondering
which is better
Shall I take it on faith?
Let them shape me like play-do
while I
shut down the whys
and hows?
Or demand the truth
and pose here
with this gaping tunnel
in my psyche
either way
there's something missing
Author notes
It's been a while since I've written anything so I'm a bit rusty.
I left the church my family raised me in to investigate other churches. Then I started reading literature that was against that church. Then, because life is ironic and complicated, I started going to it again to make them happy. But it just isnt working for me anymore. When they discuss their beliefs I always want to scoff. And even worse, now I dont know what to believe about God anymore. Like the truth is missing.
A contest entry
- There's Something Missing by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended January 11, 2008, 12 entries
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Debra,
I withdrew because i decided on another poem and can only submit one to the contest. Thank you for reading and relating, its very nice to be understood -
Hello! I got a note saying you'd entered my contest but I'm not finding it on the page. Did you withdraw? I know all about the "something missing" and not knowing what to believe when people (and their "Christian" love) so many times prove to be steeped in hypocracy. Excellent poem and well-felt. I can relate. So, whether you enter or not, you are very well-spoken and understood. Much love, Debbie
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I feel the exact same way about God! It's definitely difficult. And it really does feel like something is missing. My parents lecture me all the time about my beliefs. And honestly...I'm really not sure what I believe anymore. But this is a great write! Very impressive. And thank you for the comment by the way
Keep it up!
The One and Only...
~Lynn Jones
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This is a beautiful piece, describing well the gap your feeling and the desire to find answers. I do like the way you've worded it...
'Let them shape me like play-do
while I
shut down the whys
and hows?'
Unfortunately only you can decided whether faith is for you, it isn't for everyone. A lot who have strong faith come to a time where they question it. I hope you find what you are searching for. A superbly penned piece, not 'rusty' at all
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The last line sums up the poem, I didn't need it to understand that but it did reinforce it. Something is indeed missing. I can't offer a solution but it's apparent you need to search for that missing element.
Here's to hoping you let no one shape you like play-doh...or worse, Silly putty.
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Good luck with this extremely interesting write. xxx
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Very Good
Now I could relate to this poem. I found it echoed so many things that tease my mind. I found in losing my faith, I envied those who found comfort in theirs, because as you state in your poem:
"Shall I take it on faith?
Let them shape me like play-do
while I
shut down the whys
and hows?
Or demand the truth
and pose here
with this gaping tunnel
in my psyche
either way
there's something missing"
You really have described, in very few words, that lonliness within human kind that searches for something and doesn't quite know what.
Thanks you for sharing your thoughts in what is, in my humble opinion, a very good poem.
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This did not seem rusty at all. I really liked it. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thanks Danna! Is it right for your contest?
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I see your point....
I am a religious Episcopalian Christian... and trust me, I had my week of questioning some time ago.... but very quickly found God again. Because He was sending me help. Even though I love my church, agree with them, love the services and everything, I am still not good about getting to church. But I also have my own way of being Christian that I don't think anyone will ever understand... I just believe, and not let anything anyone says sway me. I have had life-experiences that just showed me the truth. *pause to argue with mother for a moment about pizza and cooking them in the middle of the night because this house has become health food land... sigh*
Sorry, lol, but yah, I say what you do... is go around to other churches like you said you were doing.... perhaps read the Bible for yourself. My suggestion is the King James Version or New King James Version. These are the versions I trust and know. Though I don't read the Bible as often as I should, I still don't get criticized by my church for anything. So if you would like, you could always try out an Episcopalian church.
If you would like you can contact me to further this discussion.
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I believe you simply need to look within, I was born and raised a catholic but it did not feel right, after alot of soul searching wanting to know all and everything. I am very stubborn, and it may sound silly but I have always loved puzzle. I needed to know, and now I do, it was with me all along, all the answer I needed, I asked and asked and just did not give up. I was quite a pain anyway, then slowly but surely I knew. so what you need you already have you just have to ask. the temple of God is within. God bless
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I tend to have an argument with my family along the same lines but you can't just choose what you believe. In fact, though, most of religion does not require God. A friend was telling me the other day that he believed in God although he had grave doubts about the existence of God.
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'the road of excess leads to the palace of wisdom' william blake
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I think that when it comes to religion you need to look into your heart. I will never step foot in a church because it's all glamour to me, i have my beliefs and views therefore i do my praying at home. I enjoyed reading this. Thankyou for sharing
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