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Hep Hound

I am a dog and I'm not dumb
If you think so your brain is numb
I understand everything you say
Speak,sit,roll over or play
My food and lodging are for free
You spend a fortune grooming me
If I'm ill or listless I get
An immediate visit to the vet
If I bark you wonder why
To understand me hard you try
With all of my demands you cope
You,my master,are the dope.

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Written November 8th, 2003

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  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    September 8

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    The begginging was great but then I don't like the way it ended. there should have been more. But overall this was a great poem. This was my fav part:

    If I'm ill or listless I get
    An immediate visit to the vet

    Just because it is true. Plus I am a dog lover. This poem flowed freely. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck to you!

  • piccola silver member
    July 17
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    thank you for the entry. Nice rhyme


  • Aedara-Wren silver member
    May 30

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    Its entertaining and the ideas are good but I feel its undermined a little by the rhyme which to me seems a little forced for example 'to understand me hard you try' which just seems a little bit of an artificial manipulation of the words to fit the rhyme rather than something coming from the natural flow. On the other hand it is a simple and amusing little poem which is effective in its own way. thank you for your entry.


  • moaner
    May 12

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    hahaha this is sooooo true! short, but this says everything you need to know about the dog, and i hate to say it, but owners most of the time are way more stupid than the pet hahaha nice write, good luck in my contest x


  • Fulabeans
    March 7
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    Holy Pancakes!

    LMAO well done, really. this one made me laugh. the first in the contest to do so. I love poetry that is both loving and funny. You did wellwith this one and the ending is spot on!

    the poem rhymed well, the flow was a bit un even at times but I liked it, it seemed to fit this piece.

    well done, and thanks for entering,
    -Dusty-


  • Mrs D
    February 6
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    MADE ME CHUCKLE

    THANKS FOR ENTERING..

  • Going Forever
    January 11
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    Good poem!

    Best wishes in the contest!!

    Rose Fairy


  • DarkHunter
    May 23, 2008
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    Love it, yeah dogs sure have taken advantage of us humans, clever dogs I say! Thanks for entering.


  • PinkPony
    December 26, 2007

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    Man, you are so right about who is boss...

    I smiled at this poem and thought what a fine poet you are... Rhyming and ideas are really right in there.


  • MysticalRayne
    December 6, 2007
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    This is very cute - thank you for the chuckle


  • pugsforlyfe
    December 4, 2007

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    yay

    This is a great poem! I love the rythem and it is funny, reminds me so much of my dog!Good times good times... good luck in the contest!


  • psychiatrists dream
    November 26, 2007
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    hahaha very, very funny, this is a genious,little poem. thanks for entering and good luck x


  • trista gold member
    May 16, 2007
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    Just rereading before I judge, and leaving applause.

  • trista gold member
    May 16, 2007

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    I admit I've seen some human and dog combinations where this is true, but I still think my dog has a corner market on being a dope. Maybe he's got me fooled...??? Nah, couldn't be.

    For a short piece, this packs a great humorous punch. Especially at the end, which just makes the whole poem. I really have no suggestions for improvement. I think this poem does exactly what it was intended to do, giving the reader a smile and laugh.

    Thanks so much for a very enjoyable entry and good luck in the contest.

    Best wishes,
    ~J.


  • tony yates silver member
    March 28, 2007
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    strong entry thanks, very enjoyable


  • CountryCousin
    March 27, 2007

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    Well.

    I guess we are all just dumb over our animals and they seem to train us. But then it is a relationship built on love and trust. This is pretty cool.


  • Larue
    February 21, 2007

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    Hello, secondary judge of the contest here. This was... an interesting poem. I was beginning to wonder where it was going, but the last line tied it all up. The rhyming pattern was visible, but in the 3rd, 4th, 7th, and 8th lines are a little shaky. Rhyming is not the only element in a rhyming scheme, funnily enough. It's the obvious one, but you must also watch syllables. Otherwise, wonderful work.
    -Skye


  • Ryno
    January 6, 2007

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    A really great and simple poem, very sweet and imaginative with great flow. It would make a great kids write. Thanks a lot for entering my contest.

    -Ryan

  • MovieFan
    November 23, 2006
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    This is a very funny poem. The rhyme scheme is really good and I like the flow of the poem. The humor is good. I really enjoyed this piece. Thanks for the entry and good luck

  • Big Hearted one
    November 12, 2006
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    lol! that was hilarious LMAO!!


  • Sam-I-Am
    September 23, 2006
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    I guarentee that my dog would totallu agree with this. My mum spends forever telling her that she's stupid. (She barks when no ones there!)

    Brilliant,
    Sapphire

  • DreamMaker06
    September 22, 2006
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    A very funny poem. I got a kick out of this. Good luck to you in this contest. DreamMaker


  • LittleAnn
    September 21, 2006
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    What an enjoyable poem, very funny! I wish you lots of luck in this conest!
    Keep on writing!
    Annie


  • November 10, 2003
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    LOL .. except, you know, you get what you give. I take care of her .. and I get a hell of a lot of love in return.


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    November 9, 2003
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    Very punchy funny!
    LOL. Enjoyed the write. Thank you! lol..CookieZeal


  • Sherry gold member
    November 9, 2003
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    Oh this is great roflol I hope you win to funny but maybe true?
    Great entry Gramps best wishes.....on this.....Enjoyed. Hugs,Sherry

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