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Shallow water

waves of emotion
wash over me;
senses submerged,
paddling in the shallows
of my thinking.

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  • Blueskywonder
    January 7, 2008

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    A very detailed piece full of emotion... well thought out. A deeply sensual piece


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    this is such a powerful write and i love the metaphors you have used in this. well done and best of luck in the contest


  • mysticstorm gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    Driting away in ones own mind is a place of peace and comfort...lovely metaphor and word choice...
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