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Stranded


Floating on cardboard
frigid waters stab
like thousand of daggers
trembling uncontrollably
winds blow hard
wishing for the sun

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20 Words Or Less
Prompt: Drift Away

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  • Tam
    January 7, 2008

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    oh wow...

    I flashed on "Castaway" with Tom Hanks...
    LOL
    which is a great flick...
    as is this lovely poem, sir! great take on the prompt...love the cardboard vessel...
    well done!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    this is an amaizng take on the prompt and really captures alot within it. well done and best of luck


  • mysticstorm gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    Very powerful write in so few words...many a days I have wished for that sun, to warm my heart and soul...bringing comfort...lovely flow and imagery...
    Thank you for entering!

  • juno0404
    January 7, 2008
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    Reminds me of the titanic, or closer to home: my life.
    this is well done.

    "trembling uncontrollably
    winds blow hard
    wishing for the sun"


    Nice imagery.
    You packed just the right amount of power into this, I feel your pain.