Lost in an abyss of hurt
where my love abides in darkness
locked in a tomb of pain.
Author notes
18 words
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest 10 entries/20 words or less by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended January 7, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
And in the end there was nothing
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a good poem penned, ah are we not all entombed by pain, especially where love's madness id concerned.
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beautifully dark and filled with imagery. wonderful
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powerful imagery with only 18 words!
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a haiku??
i love it.
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sad but good
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Wonderful
Very creative and well done.
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You've created a marvelous visual within this metaphor of lost love.
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Depressing sort of feel to it. Love often hurts alot. My mother has a poster in her laundry room about love. It says love never hurts on it, but it often does. Cause love seems so far to be a constant struggle to fight against oppositions. The world is not built to be happy constantly.
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beautiful take on the prompt, and an excellent use of 18 words. Sad, to know love is trapped...best to you in the contest~blessings always~ Trisha~
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awwww so sad, I have been there with that lost feeling.
love is there, trying to get out. all the best. success in the contest,
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Short but to the point, I loved it
Great write
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I know this all too well...living it everyday at moment...lovely words of truth...
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an amazing take on the prompt and you really capture it with the depths of your words. well done and best of luck
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