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Mind Over Matter

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The energy within you,
Invoked as it swirled.
Brought into existance,
It created our world.

Put into motion,
An image appeared.
One thought of energy,
Powerful and revered.

Merged with the energy
Dwelling on the earth.
Negatives and positives
Created mans birth.

Positives creates positives
Negatives the same,
united, creates conflict
Emotions inflamed.

In the slums of Dehli,
Thirteen year old girl,
Creates in her mind
As her energy swirls.

Full of knowledge and wisdom,
That came from within.
Creates thoughts of love
Eradicates sin.

One child,
On a journey alone.
With wisdom to guide her,
Her awareness had grown.

She sees a solution,
Cure for mankind.
It is not of matter,
It is of mind.

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everything begins with one. (the energy within us is our souls given by our creator) the one and only

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  • Gd66uk gold member
    2 days ago
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    Your pen bleeds poetic bliss all over this page, what a remarkable poem well done !!

  • Morning Flower
    August 15
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    i absoutly love this poem its groovy i can feel the song in my soul, its very good vibes, i love this keep up the great work

  • lacef
    August 4
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    Great

    Very strenghtening.

  • wow that is really cool! i love the last stanza. that is so neat! i love it!

  • Brooklyn NYC gold member
    July 19
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    Good

    YES !!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • Kazytc gold member
    July 19
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    Mind Blowing is an Understatement!

    Woweeee this hits home big time, fabulous descriptives, and graphic and poetic artistry.
    Love the way you enchant and keep the flow throughout, I was hooked.
    All of it so true and profund as well.
    Imagery is fantastic.
    Very well done it was a penomenal trip!
    Poetic Hugs,
    Kaz
    Kazytc xx


  • Swangrnv
    July 14

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    I decline..

    ..to do either also, because I love it as it is! beautiful thoughts expressed here and powerfully inspirational to boot!


  • who iam
    July 9

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    Excellent!

    Can not add or detract .You have captured the moment of creation,and a little nun who motivated the world with her love for those less fortunate!
    Beautifully done.


  • Jalalbad gold member
    June 14
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    THIS IS PURE POETRY, SHOULD HAVE A GOLD TROPHY THERE.

  • Again Brilliant

    I love your thought process and the way you put pen to paper (as it were)

  • PoeticLove
    May 31

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    Great read,

    I don't agree with everything in the poem, but i thought you wrote it beautifully. I did agree with most of it. good luck in the contest.

  • ecrivain01 silver member
    May 23

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    Not bad ...

    but a period at the end of each stanza does not constitute punctuation. Hopefully you will fix that before the contest ends.

  • dOgTaGz
    May 19
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    That was very interesting and bright.Good luck on my contest

  • Wonderful words

    I love the way your mind works and inspires beautiful words.


  • Via420
    May 15

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    Right on the money

    I wish more people would understand how their state of mind is what ails in this era of materialism we live in.

  • Bob Fox
    May 10

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    Nice

    I love the story line and the perfect rhyme. For some reason many do not like rhyme. But not I. I wonderful enjoyable & enlighening read. & Happy mothers day

  • Hello Pisces Rainbow. I have read a fair few of your poems, and I applaud you. The questions you ask and the thoughts you evoke, not just in this poem but in all I have read are one's that all souls should ask and think about. I wish you well on your journey. Regards. Ace - LightWithinMe.

  • Very profound... full of insight. Yes, i totally agree; if we harness our mind's potential we could change the world we live in. It takes allot of courage to choose not to be an effect to the cause of suffering. To open the mind completely to compassion, giving, replacing hate with love selfishness with kindness, force with wisdom. This is an excellent message... one to which i totally agree

  • Powerful!

    This piece is filled with grand themes. I've got to give this one another read to digest & make comments. I''m saving this to my DT & will get back to you. Thank you for your expression of deep pondering! Bravo for that dear one!!!


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    March 4

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    Pisces,
    each of your pieces
    proves the power of mind,
    the free will you exert
    to inspire in kind.


  • Amelus64
    February 19

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    This very good. The ability lies within us all. Finding the strength and time to put into motion what must be done while the arduous task of survival continues to sap the energy of those who would benefit.


  • JustBreathe gold member
    February 17
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    Lovely images and thoughts. Energy is a powerful force that influences everything in the universe, combining and re-combining, changing form. Like thoughts that grow and change. And everynow and then, a spark hits, and a thought is created that changes ...EVERYTHING. Like you said "everything begins with one". Wonderful write!

  • Vengence
    February 5

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    Outstanding message and verse

    Wise words and beautiful metaphors, a wonderous tale and a skilled talent for sure. God Bless and keep you safe.


  • beisekergirl
    January 31

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    true, true, true be in the earth not of it, Thats what this one makes me think of another great write, thank you so much for posting it!


  • CherryOnTop
    January 13
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    You have a way of speaking from your heart with such a talent...You will inspire many who read....

  • goalsv
    January 10
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    Nice write. Putting our mind in the positive mode surely helps out in how we handle situations.

  • Princess Adele
    January 9
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    i loved how the words flowed into each other......

  • left
    January 7

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    Compassionate talent which is one of mankind's most powerful is structurally and methodically destroyed by the mechanisms and (lack of) awareness that have been implemented and induced in society. The objective for creating such constructions is despicable. Millions of talented spirits never get a change to apply their talent and often die under dire circumstances. Still, in spite of this a great number continue to try to be compassionate, even if it kills them. And although the assaults of the dark are rapidly intensifying one of these kind spirits with outside help will be able to cure the diseases of mankind. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,

    Chris


  • princehusayn silver member
    January 7
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    This poem is empowering

    I enjoyed this write because hopelessness and despair must be given its walking papers this write goes to the root of creation and shows the reader how things came about and how to grow from despair to a more positive outlook accepting the negative because it is necessary in the creation to bring about ONE.

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