I was sent a blood red rose,
and it wasn't in the form of love.
It was tender, like a twisted heart,
trapped and locked away for eternity.
The person who sent it
was full of lies,
hatred,
possessed by an undying love -
for me.
Never before had I been more scared,
Afraid,
Frightened.
Nothing I could think of
could help me now;
as I sat, and fingered
the rose.
I shuddered as I went back inside,
closed the door
and held my teddy tight.
I was scared you see,
for the last time
I had seen this rose,
my one true love had been
taken from me.
Author notes
Earthquake! Duck!
A contest entry
- Frightened Eyes and Candy Dreams by Georgia La Mariposa.
1050 points, ended January 8, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A whatever emotions contest! by dreamersalwayslive.
600 points, ended January 13, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want a lot of poems... by love my jose luis.
900 points, ended February 21, 2008, 125 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark Inspiration by InMyFlames.
750 points, ended April 20, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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wow, this is really sad. It is very good though, you word these things so well. Great job on another great poem.
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this is really sad... i mean REALLY sad
i found one small error on your 4th line
i think it should be eternity, correct me if im wrong
a really good write well done -
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Whoops, thanks for that Em!!
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Nice... Very descriptive with strong feeling.
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I really like this poem. Its so different from other scared/ love poems. No its awesome really. Im jealous!
Keep writing awesome poetry like this! please
Nakatréa
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Wow, this had a lot of flowing emotions, this made it a very storng piece, please keep up your great writing and I wish you the best of luck in my contest.
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ooooh, love the last line, it had such an effect.
This was done really well and I'm not usually a fan of non rhyme so that's something
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wow!
This is really good and i dont usually like dark poems
but i think I like this so well because you left a lot of the poem upto the reader to use their imagination
Nice write..xo!"
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I like it.
I think it could be a bit more decribtive though. And the flow could be a bit better. It's still a lovely, but dark, poem, and i really like it. Thanks for entering my contest, and thanks for following the rules and putting "Earthquake!Duck!" in your author's notes! -
damn girl youre writing creepy poems too now...
i like this, you know my taste in poems! this is really really good, you portrayed the darkness so well...
i agree with somegirlyouknew about the teddy line, though im still not sure it fits but i love your poem so who cares!
xx
[and that is pretty much the best background ive seen on AP]
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((nothing else would fit in there lol (the teddy line hehehe) )) Thankyou for your comment pet!!
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creepy.
wow. i like this a lot. and good choice of background, it really underlines the mood of the poem. the teddy line was a little unexpected. at first i thought it didnt really fit in, but after considering it, i realized that it makes the girl in the poem seem a lot more real and human; easier to relate to.
peace.
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This is fantastic work, great take on the prompt, thank you for being one of the only to follow my rules, will read more thoroughly on judging
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