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its not emo.. its life

its not a personality its a way of life
the outstretched arms of humanity
just shoot it in its strife

emo doesnt mean cutting tho but the pain remains the same
yet physical seems to heal itself
while emotional will remain

but comfort it comes gradually
and feelings take me down
the bodies lay to waste round here
in the blood they seem to drown

its not love its suicide
and its not fate its hate
to cause the pain abruptly so
gives feelings oh so great

and back unto outstretched arms for society
and humanity still maintains
but nothing here shall ever be
scars of life and blood reign

but its not personality its a way of life
the outstretched arms of humanity
just shoot us in our strife

emo doesnt mean cutting tho but the pain remains the same
yet physical seems to heal itself
while emotions still remain

so i talked to those around me so
one of which i share
the painful sin of hating me
tho she can compare

our lives are hardly intertwined
but our blades have both seen blood
ive made her smile shes made me laugh
ive given all i could

but i just want to understand
why these things they must be so
then above i read these lines
and suddenly i know

its not personality its a way of life
the outstretched arms of humanity
just shoot us in our strife

emo doesnt mean cutting tho but the pain remains the same
yet physical seems to heal itself
while emotions still remain

A contest entry

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  • AutumnsFlame
    July 23, 2008
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    This was... well, at least in my opinion I wasn't feeling it. Your grammar was terrible. There was no imagery, not even the slightest bit of describing words. This poem seemed to be 100% emo and kind of whiny. I'm not trying to attack you, I'm just voicing my opinion. Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Poetic Drug
    July 4, 2008

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    i personally could not follow this because i have never ben in a cutting or suicide situation but once and i block that out as much as i can but thank you for the entry good luck


  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 16, 2008
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    i agree, and nice wya to write it out, great job!
    stephanie =)