A mother's tears are never lonely
for they mingle with the ones from previous cries
and they never grow weary for the fall.
Those tears fall from weakness
unmatched by devotion and unconditional love
they come in endless supplies.
Each set is for another occasion
and the occasions come more frequently these days
another collection of salt...
unnoticed.
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HeavenScent4U
Being a parent hurts, no matter how old or young your children are.
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Sadness and beauty perfectly intertwined. The beauty is in the way this has been wonderfully crafted and will pull the heart strings of many a mother who reads it. Excellent write !
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Now this was just the perfect piece to read this a.m. I loved it the first time and I still do. Beautiful. ~Pamela
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This is wonderfull... its so beautiful... I love what you say in the poem,.
Title- 10
Diction- 9
Syntax-9
Wowness factor- 9
Total- 37 great score
Thank you so much for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
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this is an extremely beautiful and peaceful piece
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awwww this was so sad, and beautiful at the same time..I love how this flowed all together and the personal touch tone with it..
Well done
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Sad
And beautiful. This is a very touching poem and it speaks to the ancient circle of life. Children are nourished with tears and love and all the things we give them.
A beautiful and emotional write.
CaliOkie
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I have "collected salt" many times. I keep it in my alabaster box. I try at best not to shed the same tears again and again but as a mother, try as I might, I sometimes repeat.
Your poem sears the heart and pulls at the ashes that crumble a mother's soul when a child hurts or she is hurt by a child. I often wonder about the pain I must have caused my mother. Hm... I tend to think, we get what we give, and sometimes even that is unbalanced in measures of love.
Exquisite work dear Sister!
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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nice write
nice write . . parenting can be difficult . . liked "A mother's tears are never lonely" and "they come in endless supplies" . .
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Excellent, and its summation is all too familiar with what we go through being a parent...thank god our love is unconditional but that does not make it any less painful when we hurt for our kids...or for us..this is beautifully executed and love the title and how it ends....tears for our kids could fill a well...and yes go unnoticed....Its been too long since we talked...I miss you! Stay well my friend, know that you are an excellent mom! and friend...
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salt of life
Original inspiration as the salt of life , mother and child tears....lovely , unique..mystical feel .
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what a wonderful sentimental wtite. I want to share here one of my favorite writes from Kahlil Gibran from his book called "The Prophet"
Children:
And a woman who held a babe against her bosom said, "Speak to us of Children."
And he said:
Your children are not your children.
They are the sons and daughters of Life's longing for itself.
They come through you but not from you,
And though they are with you, yet they belong not to you.
You may give them your love but not your thoughts,
for they have their own thoughts.
You may house their bodies but not their souls,
for their souls dwell in the house of tomorrow, which you cannot visit, not even in your dreams.
You may strive to be like them, but seek not to make them like you.
For life goes not backward nor tarries with yesterday.
You are the bows from which your children as living arrows are sent forth.
The archer sees the mark upon the path of the infinite, and He bends you with His might that His arrows may go swift and far.
Let your bending in the archer's hand be for gladness;
For even as he loves the arrow that flies, so He loves also the bow that is stable.
So beautiful..as is your pen,
Kudos,
Evan
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If you collected all mothers tear, they would fill an ocean, wonderful write from a wonderful poet, Eddy
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Good parents give so much to their children and hope they choose happy productive paths. Sometimes they break our hearts. What can you do, you can't live their lives for them. Or your own life through them! They have to go out fight for their own collections of salt. Such profoundly sad and lovely words!
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salt water...
Beautiful but poignant... and oh so true! Wonderfully well written!
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beautifully written, but very sad. I do understand the tears in being a parent. Children have a way to get them on occasion. ~Blessings always~ Trisha
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This is very beautiful...sad, but very lovely. I like how you did this. The wording is great and it reads nicely.
As a parent, I can relate...as I am sure all mothers can.
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awww Honey this is so sad yet hauntingly beautiful..
I wish you comfort on your journey..
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I hurt with you for the pain in this poem. The poem its self is a pure work of art. I love the background.
Love,
Amera♥
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Wow this almost made me cry. I watch my little girl grow up and it just kills me at time. I write about her and the tears just come so freely. This is lovely and packed full of truth and tenderness. Wonderful expression of your love. Well done.
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so beautiful and so true, wonderful work 
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Feeling sad that your child is growing up? This was great... I love the whole "collection of salt" theme. I love reading your motherhood poetry... Gives me a bit of the "other side" of the story. 
I love it!
Always,
Cassie
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and a parent understands your words so deeply and profoundly. I know you are crying for your children.....as parents we always do for one reason or another. May those tears of sorrow mingle with those of joy though...so they may create waters for our children to swim through....and may the salt be that what keeps them from sinking. A beautiful write......
I love you sis,
xoxoxoxoxoxo
reenie
ps: your message as of a week ago was very helpful.....I did know that [not shocked at the reality of what is ahead] thank you sweetie
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keep strong Michelle ...
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i am still but a son, so i don't know the hardships of being a parent only from what i have seen can i say, this is an amazing poem, keep it flowing
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Such collections are the diamonds of a Mother's heart. How beautifully you wear your jewelry. This hit me so close to home today and left me with my own jewels, salty and fresh. Well done. ~Pamela
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Your comment left me with a little extra jewelry too my dear
Even in a comment your words are so precisely chosen that they too could be beautiful poetry Thanks Pam for your wonderful, heartfelt comment and the applesauce
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Truly my pleasure. Such a beautiful piece.
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Being a parent isn't easy I am sure. I wouldn't know. I don't have any children. I probably never will.
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Incredible write ma!
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So true and such a wonderful
piece you have written here.
Thanks a lot for sharing this
one and keep up the wonderful
work here my friend!
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I could only imagine. Children seem to be a sense of pride and torture with everything in between.
And then some parents, ughm... I won't even get into.
Quite emotional stuff and gives us no-kidders a great personal view on why being a parent hurts.
~Steve
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So beautiful in its sadness. Touches the soul.
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this is a beautifully emotional write which really captures the meaning of a mothers love and tears. well done
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