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Angels cry when children die

The angels cry, when children die,

and rainbows fade into the sky,

the earth stands still to say goodbye.

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When children die, the angels cry.

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Eternal sleep, mem`ries to keep,

yet sorrows sting we feel so deep,

can’t dry the eyes they still must weep.

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Mem`ries to keep, eternal sleep.

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The heavens hold, their souls of gold,

keeping them safe from dark from cold,

until a time we join the fold.

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Their souls of gold, the heavens hold.

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Steering the wheel, our spirits heal,

on borrowed time our knees do kneel,

not blaming God for life’s ordeal.

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Our spirits heal, steering the wheel.

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In heavens nest their souls will rest,

we will live on, we’ll do our best,

until a day, we’ll be His guest.

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Their souls will rest, in heavens nest.

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The angels cry, when children die

and rainbows fade into the sky,

the earth stands still to say goodbye.

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When children die, the angels cry.

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And so do I

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  • Seeking Peace silver member
    March 14, 2008

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    Hood Wink!!

    This is so sad and beautiful, I do believe angels cry when children die you have penned this so eloquently and gracefully.... just superb, enjoy the love from your Poetic Bandit friends

    Karen


  • Tirrell
    January 29, 2008

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    This is beautiful, and found myself enjoying the inner line rhyme, it is a very lovely feel, like satin velvet running through the poem. Wonderfully written.


  • workingharleylady
    January 13, 2008

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    Tears flowing

    I love the way this poem came full circle. You show true talent here regardless of the sorrow depicted.
    I lost my son at 26 days old. I have honored him with a poem of his own & would be honored as well if you'd take a look at your leisure. Honestly no hurry. It is titled 'It takes 26 days to get to heaven'. Also the author notes speak volumes. Thank you so very much for this magnificient poem.
    Warmly,Chrissy

  • piccola silver member
    January 13, 2008

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    this is beautiful. The form is unique and the rhyme and flow near perfect. (I'm always afraid to say that anything is perfect ) I might bookmark this for it worth reading and re-reading. thank you so much for your entry.


  • queen Moderators member
    January 9, 2008

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    Angels do weep when children are lost, but i think they have a higher calling they move onto. I like to believe so anyway. Very cool background


  • debilynn gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    i won't tell about this poem for it is a perfect write as you know. the words struck me deep and hard as it will any who have lost a child. if fact, if truth be known, it took me several reads and a day before i could even find these words and i am still crying as i write this. only you sis could so deeply touch a soul on this subject. thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always


  • wakingdevil
    January 7, 2008

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    wow!wht an outstanding form, the first i've seen of this kind and it was a pleasant surprise.It must be rly tough to write in and to hold it throughout the poem w/o compromising on the rhymes is commendable.Was ;ooking for something like this-"creative, out of the box" in my contest.Best of luck


  • The Poetic Angel
    January 7, 2008

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    awwww sis this is so sad... but so butifuly done and a very interesting form you have created... the border is perfik for the words

    xxx cheeky xxx


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    January 6, 2008

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    Excellent writing of Form Poetry!

    Gosh sis this is so sad, but technically speaking this poem is a wonderfully balanced piece, successfully creating engagement and clearly conveying with consistency and smooth flow, the theme and intent...it brings a lump to my throat though as I absorb the deep emotion that your words bring forth...

    The title alone made my heart beat with a thud and your background adds to the overall sadness of this piece...I have never seen this form of poetry before, I like the reverse repeated lines and the lyrical rhythm it produces...I'm so pleased I came to read

    Much love from your ~sis


    • FifthDove
      January 7, 2008
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      Thank you Sis
      I created this form slowly, as you know I am a rhymer and it just evolved. I named it Tetra Rhyme Twist. The twist is the reverse 1st and 4 lines. It does take a bit of doing but in the end they seem to read very smoothly and steady. Thanks for dropping by, actually this poem was writen for a young fella that died last night. It is in his honor. I think you knew him also.

      Love yaCindy

  • Bob Fox
    January 6, 2008
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    With hope

    Thost that be on the list. Soft and beautiful write my friendi have known shall also

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