Staring at the screen,
Waiting for you to return
Just a glimpse of you
A minute of joy
I wait,impatiently
I want to take it slow
Learn to trust
Learn to love
Don't we all deserve a chance of happiness?
If your not the "one" so be it
You can't be the worst in my life
I like you,
I am willing to take a risk
The question is....
Are you?
Are you willing to suffer in the end?
Even for one chance of happiness
Would you take the risk with me tonight
Won't you be my last romance?
Author notes
written: 1-6-07
just something I came up with. I dont think it is my best.
A contest entry
- Calling all Romeos and Juliets by PonyPride.
425 points, ended January 23, 2008, 11 entries
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What do you think?
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nice
Very nice and unique -
i like this one way better than the other one! just b/c it's more of a happy one lol. he's a really great guy and i heard through the grapevine that he likes you A LOT. just thought i would let u know wat i heard. but then again i wouldn't recommend believing it unless he actually says that he does lol. but if he didn't he wouldn't be yea, your "friend" lmao.
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hmm i wonder who this is about
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wow
it really good. speechless. it is really good.
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Good write.
with a little tinkering around this could be very good..you have it in you..I know it..umm instead of "of" happiness..you should use "at"..it sounds better..you need punctuation in the next to last line..It needs a question mark hun...but I like how you ended it with a question..you threw the whole situation back at the one you are speaking to..Won't you be my last romance?..very good..same with the next to last verse..how you ended it..Are you?..very good..like I said some punctuation and some tinkering and this could be a solid write..sometimes this is how our muse works..sometimes they are a little slow..but everything is art and must come out..sometimes masterpieces just take some tinkering..good write hun..let me know when you edit..love you my daughter..
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I really enjoyed this. The last stanza was my favorite. It had a very simple and quick moving flow. I liked that.
Awesome write. Can't wait to read more of your work.
<3
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