With ebullient thoughts I write
poetic genius across the page
To decipher my masochistic nature
in dissection of my conscience
Ambivalent to release past apathy
Connection to my imagination giving muse
and inheritance of cosmos being
To diatribe and prune away
teratoma like words and phrases
A massacre of pointless literacy
For timeless progression and thought
Blind I may live as and always will
Thanks to these loving words of braille
I, in a cinch will finally take my own
large piece of life's great pie
Hard this journey will be,
yet while I write these poetic words;
I am free
A contest entry
- The Word Bank from "H" "E" Double Hockey Sticks by Abby In Chains..
15750 points, ended January 27, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Whoa, love for this poem "i have" like the vocabulary! i actually understood most of it to
yay. lol but beautiful write, like how you organized the words
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Great job i give you the best of wishes with this contest steve! =)
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thanks
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no problem =)
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This is a great poem i really like it
Love
Samantha
AkA
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This is much better Steve. Like the introspective journey you take:
"Hard this journey will be,
yet while I write these poetic words;
I am free."
Yep. Seems we poets have the same ideals ...
Best of luck to you!
~Steve
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Steve,
I love this poem so much. guess what you gave me the inspiration that I needed to attempt to write something for this contest.
lets see if they tear me apart...
kat
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thank you and good luck on your piece I look forward to reading it
-Steve-
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i really like this one, steve. it is interesting to see what different people write while using the same basic words.
i see steve finally got to someone before i did.
he was a bit harsh, i think, which was not necessary. because i happen to like this poem as one of the best i have read so far.
though i could assume that you have changed a few things around, as he suggested. anyway. i like this, its like a thought process. and it has some detectable PURPOSE, which many in this ocntest seem to be lacking a bit. people tend to focus on using the words so they make sense, but you are really saying somehing. nice!
i will make sure steve (the other steve) considers this poem when we are judging. best of luck, and again, well done.
Abby
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I'm glad you enjoyed it Abby, yeah thats what I was trying to do come up with a topic then fit the words into it
-Steve-
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This poem is rather difficult to read due to the caps in the first letter of each line. It is also a distraction from where one thought ends and another begins.
This style does remind me of speech class, I never enjoyed taking breaths when speaking, so I would speedily rampage through my cue cards and notes while breaking into a sweat. A five minute speech done in one and a half minutes. hmmm. ...
I could get more meaning out of your poem if it were broken in stanzas, at the very least. But it seems to be introspective. Which could go well with the style, in a sort of abstract mindset.
Thanks for your entry and good luck in the contest!
~Steve -
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I was thinking about breaking it up into stanza's I think I will do that now thanks for the suggestion
-Steve-
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Im confused but I kinda think I got it... hehehe it was kinda kool and you used alot of big words so now my head hurts but all the same I really liked it.
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I'm glad you liked it thank you!
-Steve-
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