The tears stained my skin
As you floated in my dreams
All I ever wanted
All I've ever waited for
Is to cry no more
I'm over you
And you're still stuck in my head
Should I pull the trigger?
Is it better to be dead?
I cry no more
In my lonely state
Breaking the boundaries
Of my escape
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This is really sad, but good, because you can feel the emotion in it, and it seems so real! Good Job!
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i loved all of the raw emotion in this. i could really feel the emotions...they poured out of the poem. sadly, this is something i can relate to. awesome job.
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i love it!!! its short yet totally deep. keep writing =)
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i like it well as i grasp the write i think what you mean is you want to move on and as you did he was still somewhat somehow in your mind and moving on not thinking about him is an escape from him, is like freedom.. did i got it? i find this nice, short but has a lot of meaning..
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"I cry no more
In my lonely state
Breaking the boundaries
Of my escape"
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This is very sad and a reluctant parting by the sounds of it, but the feelings you give are ours during this intense read!
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Yep Like it it was very nice You did a wonderful job keep up the great work
Redwingspirit
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