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Evolutionary friends

Hidden are the ocean depths where lies a myriad forms of life
As yet unknown to man
And in the dank rainforests where countless plants
The cures to each illness grow and have since time began
Which men of learning would have us believe
All happened just by chance
That convenient word “evolve” they use
leads us a merry dance
Man was born with a sense of smell
And by “coincidence”
Many of the flowers in the dell
Have such fragrant scents
Which attract the bees with no mean feat
Creating  honey for man to eat
Every creature on this earth
Has blood sap or juices
And though they have legs,fins or wings
They all have their own uses
The downy seeds of dandylions
float off in the air
Deposited by raindrops
Who water them with care
The seeded burrs of burdock
Adhere to lambs that pass
then succumb to gravity
And root among the grass
Our evolutionary friends maintain
All life came from the sea
Now did the seeds all swim ashore
It all seems so strange to me.

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JUDMC

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  • TabbyCat
    February 13
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    A very clever way of expressing your beliefs. I agree, and I enjoyed this piece.


  • Harlequin Dance
    December 2, 2008

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    Well-written poem on the complexity of the world. Thank you for entering this in my contest, it was a pleasure to read.


  • Shya
    September 14, 2008

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    This is true. The world is so complex, that the thought that it all came by mere chance is just about impossible. everything is so perfect... the earth's atmosphere and distance from the sun just enough to support life, and plus there is enough water for all creatures to drink. God is more logical than no-god. I believe that what you say is true, I believe that spontaneous generation, which has already been disproved by many scientists such as Pasteur, is impossible. Thanks for entering. Shya


  • City-of-Angels
    September 1, 2008

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    This somewhat reminds me what my dad always argues when we're having the evolution disscussion. Sometimes, I believe the world is so vast and complex..we may never know how we really got here. People can say God and whatnot, I try to view things from other perspectives too though. My only critiques are that maybe it could be easier to read if you divided it up into stanzas. (unless that format was what you were going for) And Please put your option number in your AN. I think you still have an option number from a previous contest.
    Thanks for the entry and good luck!


  • Hebz
    August 24, 2008
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    Love the images here

    Thnx for entering & Best of Luck : F

    GloriousGift
    Heba


  • JustFallingApart
    July 18, 2008
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    a very nice write, thank you so very much for entering i realy liked this poem


  • Poetic Drug
    July 2, 2008

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    ok there is the good news and the bad news its an alright poem but its not on topic! but thanks for entering

    • judmc
      July 2, 2008
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      boxjumper

      Re my entry "Evolutonary friends" which you say is not on
      topic.At 83 years of age what makes me tick is debunking
      Darwin's theory of Evolution which is precisely what it does.this is what you wanted on a personal level
      Best Wishes George


  • Nature Song silver member
    June 24, 2008
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    Two things were missing from this contest entry...Please read the rules and redo! Thanks ~Sie


  • Intricate Wordsmith
    June 15, 2008
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    I absolutely love the theme!


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    Thank you for this very interesting entry in our contest, we loved the subject but felt the rhythm was erratic and therefore it didn't flow smoothly.

    Thank you, please join us in future contests, we would love to read more from you...Sue and Jeff

    • judmc
      June 15, 2008
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      Sue Cardwell

      thanks for your constructive criticism in consequence I have made 7 adjustments to establish a more equitable
      equilibrium in the poem hopefully this comes up to your
      expectations.Best Wishes George ++++

  • wendymolly
    June 8, 2008
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    I love the way you have tied evolution of everything around to us in this very powerful prose you have engineered! great effectiveness and genuine originality is always a plus in contest! So it is with that that you are by all means a very well deserved contest finalist!!!
    ~pithyAplomb.


  • dreamdragon6484
    May 23, 2008
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    good

    good write, the rhyme kinda got away from you a little. but cool poem. good luck

  • bobby3332321
    May 14, 2008
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    wow

    This is so beautiful I liked it so much I read it twice

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