And the sky, it burns like fire
My world it comes apart
You're up there now, just laughing,
Laughing
'Cause you ripped out my heart
Slowly I am giving in
My heart is black as coal
You've left me cold and empty
You've destroyed my very soul
So now I stand here screaming
My mind is lost to rage
My only wish
For death to come
So I can turn that page.
A contest entry
- Love me or burn me by Shadowfang.
300 points, ended March 20, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i was just toying around with words and this came out tell me what you think
Comments
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A sad yet powerful write. Well written. Good imagery and good read. I enjoyed it especially knowing it was creative writing and not emotional real feelings.
Kelli
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beautiful like u
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I feel this has potential to be more... The depth here is subtle, spoken well - but without that conviction of feeling. The opening line is great, and made me expect a bit more imagery and thought to provoke. Nice write!
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