Blowing billows in the curtains
to make their presence known,
misty, amorphous phantoms from my past
come again to invade my home.
I thought they had been exorcised at last!
Intruding upon my very dreams
are vestiges of another life I’ve known.
relentless remnants of old sorrow,
visions of a former joy now flown.
I thought I’d banished them from tomorrow!
Respites are brief from these creatures
who recede but are never truly gone.
Their visits provoke the mournful revelation—
I am not alone.
Author notes
Option #3: Bad memories that just won't go away
A contest entry
- Words I just can't say... by aligurl.
550 points, ended January 27, 2008, 31 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
all comments would be greatly appreciated
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Respites are brief from these creatures
who recede but are never truly gone.
Their visits provoke the mournful revelation—
I am not alone.
I really loved this last stanza!
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now this is just beautiful!!! well penned, amazing, and just, ahhhhhhh!
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There are the fond ones and the foes. More formidable are those shadows that creep in our path and haunt our dispositions. You've expressed that very well.
Words, form, and content are very good overall. I'm more reluctant to critique something so personal as no one stands in your shoes.
Thank you for giving us something to think about and inspiring us to write! Warmly, CookieZeal
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Thank you!
I appreciate your taking the time to read and leave thoughtful comments. I am honored that you felt inspired to write, too.
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yes i loved this piece. I know about not being alone. About those bad memories. Thank you for expressing it for me. Thnk you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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Thank you so much!
I appreciate your kind comments,aligurl, and for offering your contest. You are an
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