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Over The Rainbow

I'm over the edge and going off the deep end
You try your damndest to lend your helping hand
But every time I shoot you down and push it away
Choak on the words when I know exactly what to say
And if only I could wake myself from this dream
Then maybe life would be a more lightend scene
And the darkness would fade like smoke into the night
And I wouldn't be blinded by a glimpse of the color white
Maybe then my resolution would occur and I'd cry
Knowing that my life was spent just waiting to die

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A friend has been trying to help me for quite sometime now but only now do I even realize that I need the help.... after she gave up.

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  • raggyann
    January 9, 2008

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    its sad that we some times push away the ones who care the most
    this poem had two faces and you wrote them well


    • just a voice
      January 15, 2008
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      Thank you I'm glad ya enjoyed it. I'd leave ya a more thoughtful comment and tell ya how much it means to me and all that good shit but I'm really in a hurry right now and not exactly in a good state of mind right now so I'll come back later and be sweet.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    I'm sorry she gave up!! As you age you realise that people push away those who are closest to them and care the most when they are going through rough times. (I do the same) I'm grateful for those who've realised that and hung in there for me!

    So sad!!


    • just a voice
      January 8, 2008
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      Oh its ok, she didn't exactly give up she just kinda stoped pushing so hard. I couldn't say as I blame her if she did give up though. But anyways, this poem isn't really as personal as it seems like it is. Sure I was going through a tough time and needed some help but I actually wrote this from someone else's experience and blended what I was going through with it. But its ok, we're both fine now. Thanks for the lovely comment though, I've been meaning to read some more of you're poems but havn't really had time. I'll go right now and read a couple.


  • PrInCeSsOfRoCk gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    great poem, had a lot of feeling in it. i tried to help a friend but she just pushed me away becoz she thought she didnt need it either so its kinda interesting to read a poem from the view of someone on the other end of it. well done as usual


    • just a voice
      January 7, 2008
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      Thanks I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm sorry your friend didn't let ya. I know how it is, I've been on both ends actually. Thanks so much for the lovely comment.


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    January 6, 2008

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    this is a fantastic peom,
    i can relate completely,
    to the feeling,
    i have felt this way so many times,
    im thrown off the edge,
    so many times,
    great poem,
    xxx if you need to talk im here for you,
    love kitty xxx,
    <3


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    January 6, 2008

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    this is such a great poem. You have written this wonderfully as it is great that you realise you need help, whatever it may be. So often this happens, we feel we are being nagged all the time, until the nagging stops and we realise that they were right in the first place. Well done, this is a great write.


    • just a voice
      January 6, 2008
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      Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and yes... this does happen so much. Probably more often actually, we shoot the ones who are trying to help down rather than just let them help then later realize that we actually did need it afterall. Thank you.

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