You are devoted to triggering hopeful thoughts
in the minds of those who are lost.
Your written word teaches me
your soul contents, at a cost.
But the only cost it was to me
has been a blessed opportunity
To ponder what it is in life
that you have made me see.
As 'time ticks slowly forward'.
You've reminded me to smile
And if by chance I get 'left behind',
friends, like 'angels' will stay awhile.
To remember that though souls may be fragile,
they still 'glisten in the moonlight'.
You bring understanding in the world
of those who 'want the light'.
Though you have experienced much pain,
fragile 'falling' and 'numb to the bone',
You talk of 'starting over' and 'keeping strong'
'Bright darkness' is your tone.
Now I know there is something 'to live for'
God will 'save me from the night'.
For how can I ever give up
When you promised me 'there is light'.
Author notes
I loved being challenged to find meaning that will impact my life, let alone by another persons life. You have shared a part of yourself in your poetry and yes you have impacted my life by holding this contest, throwing out the challenge and allowing me to search for something then find it. You have taught me to challenge others to search and that there is always hope.
A contest entry
- IMPACT by brightXdarkness.
600 points, ended January 23, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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WOW Awesome, this so truly inspirational. As a Christian, I feel and connect to this poem. IT is truly touching. Thank you.
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Gee! Thanks so much for taking the time to comment. I look forward to reading some of your poems also. Take Care
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This poem was very good towards the beginning, but then it became rather cliche. And I don't understand why there are all these quotes everywhere. Is that for some reason that is purposeful? Overall though, this is a good poem. Thank you very much for entering my contest, and I do hope you had fun entering! Alex
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Thankyou for your comment. I read all of your poems so as to try to get to know you then write of how that impacted me. The 'quotes' everywhere are your own words that I found in your writings. Most are the titles of your poems. A challenging but rewarding contest. Thank you and take care
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this makes me think of my own thoughts of those who are lost to pray for those souls out there who need the lord , who needs strength and guidance and above all salvation for their soul , yes we all have experienced much pain and darkness but there is a light out there waiting for us to brighten up our days and nights and his name is jesus christ
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You are on the right track. You just need to fix the rhyme in stanza three. In stanza four, the last line. It would flow better if you said, "of those who want the light, but don't know how to fight". But this also makes the line a lot longer. You also could take out the last three words of the line, so it reads, "of those who want the light". The line still makes sense because the "want" part means that the "of those" still don't have "the light". I like the content of the poem. The 'quotes' that you use in the poem bring it to a more personal level, which also makes the poem more realistic, because it is someone's actual words. These are just suggestions. And keep writing.
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Thankyou
I really appreciate your suggestions. I have made some changes and I think it flows a bit better. Thanks for taking the time to comment. I was stuck on the third stanza but ended up changing the whole thing around.
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