I am..
The hard outer shell,
surrounding a glass interior.
Held together for the world,
While shattering within.
Nichole A.Dustin (C)
1/5/2008
Author notes
Prompt finish..'I AM' with 4-16 words.
A contest entry
- I am... by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended January 6, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
My mother taught me if you have nothing nice to say don't say it at all. We are not here as pros, we are here to share our art and have fun. *grin*
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so sad and full of emotion.
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Ooooooh!
Well, what Mom said can be useful at the right time. Giving ones honest opinion can be done in love & without being hurtful. This can be done with grace but many don't take the time or make the effort needed to get to this place! If we don't share our lives honestly & use our experience to help others what on earth are we doing here? This is a great piece, short, sweet & with wonderful metaphor that gets to the heart of the matter! Now that's my honest opinion as a writer! Well done & thank you!
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Great!
Excellent!
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this is excellent, i really liked it, the form especially.
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- The hard outer shell,
make the t lowercase.
-While shattering within.
make the w lowercase.
this was beautiful.
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Thank you for your wonderful comment on my poem. =)
This is beautifully expressed, and I know that I can certainly relate to it. Awesomely done!
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Well written and deeply profound... x Thanks ever so much for sharing... Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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Very well written to the prompt...
This could describe me as well.
I wish you luck here in this contest
Becky
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