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[ Stumbling down this, A touch on the shoulder, ]

Stumbling down this,                        A touch on the shoulder,
tree strewn path.                            a hug here and there.
Looking for,                                    With a smile,
nothing.                                          You promised me it all.

A wisp of wind brings,                      You knew all that I did and,
a whisper.                                        all that I regretted.
Louder, louder still,                          When I wasn't ready,
the voice grows.                              You said you would always be there.

Off the path now,                              Someone new came along,
a branch snaps.                                  I became a memory.
Side-stepping in order to avoid,          But to me you were my air,
a cliff's edge.                                    you were my sustenance.

Running in circles,                              A glance from you and,
you trip.                                            I was forced to turn away.
Falling onto a rock,                            A kiss from you and,
you went unconscious.                        My heart would freeze.

[A boy, met a girl.                              A dusting of cherished, memories?
Months on end they were,                  was all that was left to exist in my heart.
acquaintances.                                  Without a second thought,
The wishes ran wild.                          you stole my dream.]

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  • CarCrashHumor
    February 19, 2008

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    "A glance from you and,
    I was forced to turn away."

    I love that line!
    and also "a touch on the shoulder"
    because that's such a simple, friendly gesture
    but it can mean the world.

    the setup was creative
    thanks for entering


  • xBluexEyedxGirlx
    January 5, 2008

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    love it. I think it's absolutely amazing.
    haha. I entered this contest, I didn't know you were in it


    • slipping.whirlpool
      January 6, 2008
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      thank you love. haha, i was looking at the contests and i liked this one, i'm pretty sure i entered after you. i didn't realize that it was the same one you entered.
      *With Always Love