I can't stand it anymore
And it's just as bad as before
Through all the tears and all the lies
I can't even find hope in the sky
I'm lost and confused
Just so fucking used
And the past that I am walking
Is not what I was wanting
Unknown fears and unseen tears
wandering lost through all these years
The city lights and passing cars
Steals the lights from the stars
As the time excapes me
Your lies wont let me be
Now I'm surrounded by my fears
And can't stop these dark tears
I had so much to hope for
And so much much I'd wished for
Now I'm just broken
From what was never spoken
I now know my fears and dry my tears
Yet I still wander lost through these years
And the city lights and passing cars
Still steal the light from the stars
Author notes
this is inspired by many old and forgotten events from my home before the military... please tell me what you think...
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Comments
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I love the last stanza the best, this is depressing and I can only hope that you find your way.
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It's pretty. I like the part about stealing light from the stars. However, the poem in general seemed slightly generic to me. There were a few spelling errors but beside that I couldn't find anything wrong with it. Thank you for entering.
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i think its great, impactfull and meaningfull..I would add puncutation and take out the ANDs, just me though..great job all in aoll, thanks for sharing!
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I really liked the emotion in this poem. Real, and straight forward. Thank you for entering, and best of luck.
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