Conscience,
Hello!
Are you there?
Do you care?
Oh God,do you even exist?
I feel stupid talking to you,
I mean that is if you exist.
You do, right? I mean I have
doubted you, but you've got to
exist or else I would never feel
happy,sad,bad,guilty,and all the
feelings I feel.
Sometimes I think you live in a
different universe-so far from what
I am, what I want to be.
But other times,I can feel you,beside me,
as if an inner coat I have to wear to keep
me warm inside.
Sometimes I hate you,I hate who you are,
and what you have made me. But then, you are me.
You and me the unseperable twins from whitin.
Look, don't get all mushey or anything,
but I love you, I need you.
I mean who else is there for me when
all my friends abandon me? Who else tells
me God cares when I feel neglected?
Who else tells me I can conquer obstacles
to aquire my dreams? Who else is there for me
every milla second?
You are! and that's why I love you.
So, don't give up on me, I'll be needing
you even if sometimes I won't admit it.
Hey Conscience, you still there?
A contest entry
- Write to your Conscience by princess hope.
700 points, ended January 23, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From December 2007 by amaranthine lover.
800 points, ended January 11, 2008, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I think that the concept of this piece was good, but you put too much wording into it, to me it sounds like a diary entry, perhaps put the conscience talking back to you with a few images to really grab the reader's attention thanks for entering
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Well done, and written. Something a little bit different, and definately stood out. Best of luck , and thank you for entering.
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not good to like question God
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I really enjoyed reading this!
I think that you did a great job putting
this piece together. Well done and thanks
a lot for sharing it here! Good luck to
you with this one in the contest!
Jeremy0826
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