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Navigate the Stars

Another scar
another broken piece
another happy ending lost.
On the verge of losing faith
hope silently slipping away.
You reached out your hand
touching deep into my soul
accepting everything
and not running away.
You’re teaching my timid, tired heart how to love,
bringing back the sun.
Flying us towards starry heaven
I can feel the warmth on my face,
the surreal light brushing my fingertips
as we float hand in hand.
But then you to let go,
the heavy weight of fear
pulls you down.
I struggle to hold on,
we’ve come so close.
I want you.
I want you to be happy.
I wish I could erase the past
or go back in time,
mend your heart
or whisper her wisdom
so she would never have hurt you.
My fingers start to slip.
Holding too tight only hurts more.
I fall.
A tear kisses my cheek
yet I smile.
Just the starlight falling on me
keeps the renewed hope strong.
The love is still the same.
I look up and see
your hand extended.
But a chain still there.
The sky is limitless
and full of new discoveries, memories
but you can’t see the outcome of the path.
That’s the beauty of the mystery of love.
I’m taking your hand again,
but are you willing to cut loose the chain
and free yourself,
take the possible risk
of falling again?
I can’t see through the clouds
but I’ll try with all my heart
to keep you in the sky.
Put the trust of us in God,
the true and only navigator of the stars.

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  • bananasfoster42
    April 21, 2008

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    wow!! this is amazing! i feel like i can relate a bit to the person in the chains. thanks for the entry!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 29, 2008

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    This is such a sweet write and I understand it perfectly because Steven and I are teaching eachother this; it's very expressive and it's very true, but believing in someone takes a while, yet it's worth it if you have found one of the good ones.


  • Falling.Again...Xx
    February 19, 2008

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    Wow. That just about explains it.... Great imagery too. Great job!

    ♥Summer Moonstone♥


  • N e a r
    February 16, 2008

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    Illusive imagery... Very well done! Metaphorically, this is well displayed, too. I love the way you can relate your feelings to other objects and meanings. It gives the poem structure and the reader something to identify their own feelings with. Excellent write!
    ~

    Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • RyanosaurusWrecks
    January 6, 2008
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    or whisper her wisdom
    so she would never have hurt you.
    i like this very much...

  • LlamaLord
    January 5, 2008

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    wow

    another good one! i liked the one before this a lil more though...

    in the line "the heavy fear weight of fear"
    did you mean "the heavy weight of fear"?
    because that would make a lot more sense!

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