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Paint My Soul

This love you hold me captive in
My lips cannot spill the words I need to express
My eyes cannot meet yours without looking away
My body trembles at your touch.
So I will paint my soul for you.
Crimson soaring through orange
A sunset on fire meets the heart
These minute patterns,
the passion you have staind on my heart.
I etch your name next to mine
in the language of infatuation.
I pray when your eyes lay eyes on this
you will read my soul with yours.
For my body fails me
but my heart is strong.

A contest entry

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 25, 2008

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    These words ring true to me. I can understand how you feel. I especially liked the first 3 lines. I know


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    February 17, 2008
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    Very pretty write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • N e a r
    February 16, 2008

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    Typo: "the passion you have staind on my heart" staind to stained.
    Another great write and worth a read. Your poem's tone brings out the feeling that the writer is growing weak, and yet the emotions are fiery and strong. Like the ending says, the heart is just that... Beautiful.
    ~

    Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • just mercedes gold member
    January 11, 2008
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    Thank you for your fine entry in this contest. I am humbled by your intense reaction to the prompt, and read your soul with mine. I feel that your heart is indeed strong, and your words also. You can be very proud of this work, poet, you held nothing back.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    January 6, 2008

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    A beautiful tribute to your feelings of love. You expressed emotions that are deep and intense. Great job with the prompt.
    Good luck in the the contest.
    Soulful Woman

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