It's quite a feat to stand and eat
with a clowder of cats at your feet
but then when I try to take a seat
they jump in my lap to get my meat
they don't do tricks to get a treat
If you need a pet they cant be beat
they cover up their poop o how neat
do you want a cat?..if so lets meet
quicker than a mouse they are fleet
they claw the couch then act sweet
not enough sense to cross the street
but loving a cat makes you complete
A contest entry
- C...is for Cat. by DogFish.
600 points, ended January 18, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want poems about cats! by Meroza.
450 points, ended May 18, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MAKE ME LAUGH! -PW allowed by Heva Feva.
800 points, ended August 12, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Aww that's very cute! I love this, made me smile [=
You do need to fix some punctuation but it really is a great poem.
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
-heva
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kudos for a brilliantly structured poem, it is one of the best i've read in a while - mastering the form should be taken into consideration by the judge - if it were my contest, you would gain extra credit for presenting the poem flawlessly. if this does not take a trophy, I would be greatly disappointed. good luck in the contest.
blessings and best wishes, astralshepherd
~r.
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I had fun writing this as I do have 6 cats and they are all spoiled, I often stand and eat...ha!
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Very cute title and I always like to learn new words! thank you for teaching me "clowder"! I've seen folks with such collections of cats but didn't know there was such a term.
The poem struck me first off like Bob Dylan's "Subterranean Homesick Blues":
"Get sick, get well
Hang around a ink well
Ring bell, hard to tell
If anything is goin' to sell
Try hard, get barred
Get back, write braille
Get jailed, jump bail
Join the army, if you fail"
I congratulate you ,You made 12 "-eet" rhymes without using the same word twice! And not only that, each time the word contributed appropriatly to the theme you were developing.(Although, "they cover up their poop o how neat" did make me wince!)
My favourite line was "they claw the couch then act sweet". That just about sums up "Phelynes" in a breath!
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How sweet!
This was a cute and clever poem. Lots of fun to read. I enjoyed it. Best of luck in the contest.
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Is there a name for the aaaa,aaaa,aaaa rhyming scheme?
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truthfully, I have no idea. I read 'The Lady of Shalott' and there is a repeated rhyme form going through that by Alfred Lord Tennyson, but my little poem is different from that. We will have to ask someone who knows, I haven't a clue.
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