breathing deep;
falling too fast
into your soul-
catching myself
knowing I’d just
get hurt again.
lying to myself
about what I feel
for you;
but pretences
fade away someday
& I was caught up
trying to tear away.
just in time
you smiled
& I knew
no matter the lies
I tell myself- I was
already entangled
in your crazy love.
smiling back
whispering in my
lonely heart-
‘help me love again,
take me anywhere you go
& I swear, I’d always be there’
Author notes
PROMPT: take me with you
A contest entry
- options by burdenbytruth.
600 points, ended January 23, 2008, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very nice and sweet, this poem was a very nice read. Thank you for entering.
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Beautiful, sweet and brimming with delicacy, as are all your poems. Keep it up Char
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Your last stanza! Dreamy... brilliANT! loved it so much! i wish i could say that my guy... man! take me anywhere and i'll promise to be there... SUCH AN AMAZING WRITE!
Your whole poem was brilliant! so lovely... and its hard to let go of come people in life okay... but u just have to!
And this poem was lovely... i could relate a bit... but heck! nvm, This was sweet... but it had a few sad moments of its own you know! the beginning...
BEST OF luck in the contest... i hope this relationship works out for you! you're a lucky and awesome girl you know... Love you to bits! have fun! and takkire... go crazy charu!
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I really love your style of writing, it's unique, different, I really like it...
This poem is another example of your excellent writing ability, awesome job, good luck in the contest!
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thank you so much for your awesome comments dear
I am really sorry I haven't returned any of them or even dropped a hello 
life's been so terribly busy...I haven't even had time to post many poems here. anyways, thank you very much for everything
take care,
char
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